u know, it's weird, cuz i liked this. i didn't think i would at first becuz it was kind of vague, but then the vagueness turned into some sort of movie-like sequence in my mind. i felt like events were being time-warped, some things just flitted past in an inconcievable smudge, some things were dragged out more than needed, but it made sense, and it sounded nice and it played out well. basically, i really liked it ]

update soon!

enjoying it already.

Wow! You're great with Freddie's POV! You nailed him perfectly, and the situation is absolutely hilarious and scary (well, for Fredward.)

I also loved that quote in the beginning. It sort of set us up for the story at hand. "Not do that at this time"? Hmm, well, WHICH time then? :)

I also LOVED thid line:

"I’m guessing it lasted five, maybe ten seconds tops.

Oh, that’s not that long, you may dare to think? Let me rephrase that.

I’m guessing that the kiss I shared with Samantha eternally mocks my guts Puckett lasted five, maybe ten seconds tops."

Pure genius! Please update this soon :)