As usual, I loved it. Short introspective pieces like this are almost always the best. Good story.

Really liked how philosophical this all was (and Death Note is so perfect for deep fics). I like the contrast between L and Light, grown ups and children. I loved the line : "Light, he won't pretend - this kind of pretend is only for grownups and he's too close to winning (too close to being lost forever), he can't afford to falter. He knows survival of the fittest, but he's only eighteen and he wants to be a god. An immortal child soaring to the zenith."

The parts about the sky and getting married to Light were priceless as well.

I know I should find something to point out, but besides a bit of wording issues, I couldn't find anything I didn't like.

Still love your stories. Hope you never think they're a waste of time.

Short and sweet is good, but I still adore your long and wordy style. I honestly can't get enough of it! ^_^ It's a damn shame when something's "just a drabble" and is short because of that. Those damn shames are part of the reason why I love your style. :3 It's a while before it's over, not just five minutes. :P The fact that the entire story fits on a single scroll of my mouse was a bit of a shock. XD The wedding bit was absolutely darling. X3 It was too cute of a mental image! Kyaa~! Thanks for writing!

That was amazing. How else can I say it? Well, all right, there are many other ways to describe this, but "amazing" is the shortest, most concise word I can come up with at the moment.

I love how you've compared them to children. When one really does think about it, both men are like children who never really were, in a sense. They manipulate and deceive each other in ways that other people couldn't possibly pull off, and yet the two acts are undeniably childish.

Hmm...if I reread your stories, do you think I'll absorb at least a fourth of your talent by osmosis? Lol!

Favorite part was the ending! That rooftop scene will live on in all our minds.

Woah, deep. Love the comparison to children... it's true, Light's actions are similar to one of a child. And L's view of Light is so real and accurate and heart breaking. Awesome.

AMAZING.

Every line of this was just, WOW.
I'm spellbound.
:D


~ Jungle John

That was beautiful, and I agree with what the last though was- 'Or maybe a funeral,"
I believe just about everyone knew L was GOING to say it, but never did.

I thought this drabble/one-shot was so beautiful. Your description conjured up some intense imagery for me, especially the part about them standing on raised stakes, both looking at the sky. I especially liked the beginning, talking about children's behaviour, and then your comparison of kids with L and Light. The way it was written really made me think about it on a deeper level.
You did a great job on this one =D

It made me smile.

Oh, absolutely beautiful! I can hardly even find the words but your themes are always so intricate and spot on, and your writing style so philosophical.

I just can't think of anything else to say other than brilliant.

I have the same problem with the length. I try and write something short, but it ends up six hundred words more than I wanted. Hehe.

I loved this though, it was gorgeous. I suck up so badly in reviews all the time, but I just don't know how to praise you enough for this. For what it's worth, I envious that I can't write like this. It gets better, I rarely, if ever, find myself jealous. (I have other flaws and drawbacks to my character.)

The way this was written, the use of the language, the ideas, everything was fantastic. It was beautiful and creative and clear.

It's hard for me to describe, really. It was...I don't know, I'm running out of appraising adjectives. There was so much to love, though. Awesome job, please continue your writing, you're quite cut out for it. I'll be looking forward to future contributions. =3

(Sorry for the craptastic review on such an amazing fic.)

Cheers!

absolutely beautiful

While I always greatly appreciate and respect the genuinely honest feedback Star Jinin provides, and know full well she is entirely entitled to her own opinion, I must whole-heartedly disagree about the "losing your touch" thing. I actually think this little fic shows real growth and experimentation in your writing, making it much more a step forward rather than any backward regression.

I'm of course keeping in mind here the fact that we've discussed together in the past how both you and I feel we greatly struggle with being overly wordy and overdrawn with our descriptions and explanations of things; this fic shows me here that you are truly attempting to improve that by compacting your writing into fewer, more vital phrases that cut straight to the heart of the matter quicker. And I really do think you've done a lovely job of it overall here.

I find this one shot thought-provoking and genuinely moving... I see it as a sort of "alternate p.o.v." to your first one shot about the rain scene from Light's perspective that I so dearly love. Although I don't find this one here carries quite the same level of raw emotional intensity and vivid symbolic imagery as that one perhaps, I nevertheless love the insightful way you explore L's various eccentricities and the emotions and feelings he was possibly experiencing at the time.

I guess the way I interpreted this fic is that you are sort of pointing out how childlike and immature our beloved L was in so many ways, no matter how brilliant and powerful-- how stunted he was in his human experiences such as relationships, and how his particularly unique lifestyle never really required of him to come to understand such "adult" ways of life as marriage and the like, at least never in the same general sense as other grown-up people have who've experienced such human milestones for themselves already.

The way I see it, L stands there and in a sense "comes of age" while contemplating his impending death and greatest failure at Kira's hands. I definitely got the sense that he was contemplating the different alternating ways in which Light was more grown-up than he and yet still more childlike than he, and how Light was his greatest rival and the only person he'd ever really been interested in or found to be a worthwhile equal. I saw that he was now associating this new "understanding" of the adult world, entailing marriage and the like, with his unprecedented feelings for Light (the image of Light in a wedding dress being carried across a honeymoon suite threshhold by a tuxedo'd L made me smile so much despite myself XD), and this was in turn overshadowed by his heartbreaking knowledge of his impending funeral, his doom. The part that moved me most of all was the sentence fragment- "beautiful, why has it been so long since he noticed it?" It just reminded me again of the heartwrenching rain scene in all its vivid bittersweet beauty, and I got that hollow ache inside thinking about L's death all over again. So yes, short, sweet simple, and still very effective.

Obviously, I have yet to catch up with you in this pursuit of "compacting" your writing, as this review very much proves. Haha. But seriously, very well done, I'm really impressed. :)