Because I really have no idea of where to start with this review, I'll just do it in a bullet-point style.
1: The Shades seems very...Pratchettian, although that's not really a word. It certainly seems to attract the same unsavory types.
2: How on EARTH did you find out about/come up with the bit with the watch with the face removed? I'm rather scared to look that up...
3: I really liked how you played with them making up the rules.
4: http (:)(/) w (.) youtube (.) com (/) watch (?) vKNuBNwMIdXM does not work when following your instructions. However, http (:)(/) w (.) youtube (.) com (/) watch (?) v (=) KNuBNwMIdXM does work (it leads to "scenes from "the addiction" II / chiasm - chosen fate", which is hopefully the place you wanted it to go). You might consider adding in the "=" after the v...or just point people who ask at this review, either one would work.
It was an excellent piece, but for some reason catching up with your Sword and Shield stories has left me awake at 3:30 with an 8:00 class. I hope you're satisfied.

I admit I am slightly horrified at how this guy died. My first thought, when Brenda explains why he did this was, "Where did Kayasuri-n learn this?"

I like the Rules joke, and how their interpretation is up for... interpretation.

My favorite lines are the rule about being sent for coffee being countered by the rule about Smith does not equal go-fer.

The video doesn't work for me. But I'm glad you're continuing the series.

Very enjoyable, as usual.

Have a great week!

Very amusing, Kaya, as usual. I certainly pity Mewtwo...he's such a cleanly creature, and that little walk...tsk. Poor guy. Meanwhile Brenda's so utterly peppy...lol.

The Shades? Um...oh dear. He can't even utter the word 'semen' and he's stuck in a place with driveby shootings and various other illicit activites? He's doomed.

(Snickers.) Auto-eroticism and Darwin Awards...nice. Tim Horton's? (Becomes extremely amused.)

Very nice piece of work...I'm looking forward to more hints at the gods and the next story.

See ya'.

- Abby

That was fast...

YAY FOR 'The Rules!'

Brenda reminds me of my dad, nan and one opf their friends... they NEED coffee.

COFFEE FOR THE COFFEE GOD!

Blood sounds better...

~General Everin Stormclaw of the Emerald Stars, Dragon Prince and the Fifth Sutakage, Bearer of the Prophecy, out.

Heh heh. That... was really, really funny. I don't know what it is about dead guys with woodies at stupid in the morning, but I definately laughed. May not have been the best thing for me to read before work, but meh. At least I'm awake now. Which is more than can be said for most days when I have to go in before nine.

My favorite Darwin award involved lobsters...

Anyway, a great read. Now onward, to Chosen Fate!

Well, that was an interesting introduction. I can't say I've read any stories that start with any kind of auto-erotic accidental suicide before. Well done, you're filling a niche.

And calling the area "the Shades" just reminds me of Pratchett. I'm not sure if this is intentional, or simply because I love Pratchett.

MNBP