aww that was cute i loved it tons

How sweet and cute!

Sorry, I didn't make it to the end of the story. Overall your writing is good - although you could use a few more commas in some of your longer sentences. My major complaint is you use the expressions " haired" and/or "keeper of blah blah blah" way too much. Using it once in the story would be all right. Twice is pushing it, three times is insufferably pretentious, and four is simply over doing it. Yes, it's a good turn of phrase and describes the person you're referring to, but *every* time I see it I have to stop reading and think, "Exactly who is the author referring to here?" (I like reading digimon stories, but I'm not a huge fan of the show, so overall I'm pretty fuzzy on the kid's physical characteristics and their crests.) It is perfectly all right just to use the person's name, or "he" or "she". Doing that would make the story flow a lot more smoothly. Sorry for dumping on you like this, but I think if you made that change to your style it would improve your stories a lot. Style Warrior.