 Laa Chase 8/28/08 . chapter 1So, it was blunt. I like blunt.
I'd continue on with it, cause it's not a bad idea to start off with. But, I find it kinda unrealistic to their characters, because Claire's prominent family is what drove her to John's criminal arms and away from guys like Andy in the first place, and then Allison mildly pisses John off because she won't smoke dope. So since you never filled those holes in the story, I can't like it much.
Not that I care or anything. Just saying.
At least your friend liked it, ne? Ciao! |
 Cuban Sombrero Gal 8/27/08 . chapter 1You already know I love you Ryepie, but this was awesome.
I love the way you brought Bender and Allison together, and how they all had a part in it. :) Great characterisations, and just... thanks. FASistas FTW! |