HAHAHA. He is definitely 100% evil.

Gosh, I love him. xD

Though I didn't get the collared shirt and the freaking out part...but it was so humourous and subtilly romantic!

Awesome idea! Keep up the fabulous work! :)

nice!

so it was really Ryoma on the date?? hahaha!! and he also had a kiss mark on his neck right? that's why Ryoga asked him to wear a colared shirt??

it was fun! lol

lmao that was awesome xD i love it i dono whether it would be a gd idea or nt to continue it on or you could create a whole new story based on that plot actually showing how ryoa pulled it off ect... i dono xD jst some rambligs it mite be a gd idea it mite not anyways it was gd and i enjoyed it :D

Ah ha ha ha. What clever dialogue. Top marks!

XDD LOVE it!!
Really cute :]
Great job! :D

Heh, I thought it was really cute ^^ At first the writing seemed a little awkward (probably because it was a translation) but it smoothed out. I liked it a lot, keep up the good work =)

XD I absolutely love it!

Really cute :) I adore the interaction between Ryoga and Ryoma. In all, really interesting plot and great writing!

hahaha!
nie one-shot!!

I think you should do a small Omake. I think it should go kinda like this. But, you can do it how ever you like. It'll be great.

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Omake.

Ryoma walked up to Tezuka and Oishi the next day at practice. "I hate you," He said. The two both looked at him and Oishi was pointing to himself. "No, not you Oishi-sempai. You!" He said poking Tezuka-buchou in the chest.

"Why?" Was the simple answer. Fuji, Eiji, Inui, Taka, Momo, and Kaidoh came up the hall at that moment.

"I told my family and brother that we had tennis practice that day for a reason. So, when my brother comes up to you in the book store and says 'So, how did your alls tennis practice go today?' you say, 'It went fine,' not, 'I didn't know we had practice today'." Ryoma ranted.

"Ryoga knows?" Momo said frantically. Ryoma whipped around towards the group.

"Yes, he knows. And, it's all his fault." Ryoma pointed to Tezuka making him feel small. "Baka." He said. "You have no idea, how big the mess you made is that I have to clean up." He then, walked off down the sidewalk just as Sakuno came out of the library. He caught her by her hand and dragged her along with him. Everyone barely heard him say, "Parents and brother want to meet you." Before her laugh echoed through the air.

Lol.

Mr. Sarcasm, huh?

So cute. So cute!

ha! I know you! You're also Pinoy! You also translated yours?! Neat! I just translated mine three days ago! I like your one-shot! Keep it up fellow pinoy! Yay!

I also read your filipino version... There are some revisions in the dialogue... but still it's good and funny...