wow. so odd, yet so brilliant! really well done, i liked it a lot! if only it would continue... lolz.
c ya l8r!

good

hm, its good, a little confusing but a good plot none the less. thx again for entering the contest! X3

I'm assuming that there must be some sort of Holiday or something for the party, because I don't want to turn this down.

It's an interesting idea - it's definitely original. Your adjectives are lovely. I like the way you describe different scenes. The way you write dialogue is also unique, you are one of the few people who write it like that.

I like how Kirio imagined (he did imagine the scene, right?) the scene with Miyon.

Well, it definitely captured my attention and I couldn't stop reading it until the very end. Again, thanks for entering.

i loved this.
your pure descriptions to every fine-lined detail was simple magnificent (:

COOL!! :D But I don't get it. lol!! XD

-Toast-chan-