Dood, do not give up... Keep them roling... I want you to know that someone is paying attention... Some times, we are just busy, however I still appreciate your writing.

To Damiar:

"Energize"

Lt. Vance was beamed over to the Companion along with the other three teams. Unbeknownst to the rest of the team, Ensign Baxter was highly incompetent and sent Kaleb's team's signal into Main Engineering. The chamber was flooded with highly charged plasma and theta radiation. While suffering quite severe injuries, the team could be mended. Lt. Vance, however, rematerialized in the warp core, instantly vaporized by the matter-antimatter reaction.
Upon learning of this, Alexander snapped and had a full-onset psychotic break and flushed himself out the airlock. Miria took command, but was summarily executed by Colonel Skahticus. Lt. Alae was close behind, but not before she snapped his neck in her final breath. Dr. Cavenaugh locked herself in a closet and hyperventilated 'til suffocation and Cadet Koday assumed control and the entire sector went up in a fiery blaze from the cosmic lunacy of the notion in his first five minutes of command.

The end

more excursion...

...NOW!

Nice! I hope to read about more action next chapter!

This is a very impressively written story.
It is quite enjoyable to read.
My only problem is that the plot is a bit too complex and convoluted; too many parallel events and characters to keep track of.
Try to make it more simple next update.

Hello! Great set of updates so far...
I really enjoy reading the newly posted material...
I especially enjoy reading the last chase scene involving the run about.
Just one request, can you please explain about the canonical status of the federation ships used in this story?
Some of the data you have provided do not match those on-line supplements found in paramount pictures official website.
Some of the ships used by the alien factions seem a bit over-done and exaggerated to be feasible.
I'd like to know what sources(if any) you used when referring to the ships.
For me, the reading experience would be more enjoyable if you came as close as possible to what is canonically acceptable by most trek fans.
You could try w ditl (dot)org as a useful resource for star trek technology.
Just remove the spaces and the period is spelled out.
Thanks! I hope you do not mind some constructive criticism.

I haven't gotten very far into the story, but what I've read, I like.
I am a little confused about the whole competition to be chosen, it doesn't seem that the winner did anything besides show up and not become ill.

"Miria scolded herself, Remarkable. You attempt to comfort him and now he’s manic"
According to Mirriam-Webster Online, mania is "2 a: excessive or unreasonable enthusiasm". The President's friend seems more depressed then manic.

A'lae's uniform (Or 'Nightingale', if it is A'lae's code name, her real name is never mentioned probably due to the cloak and dagger nature of her mission) is mentioned as green, yet she fulfills the role of a medic without raising suspicion. I thought Security/Engineering was green/yellow and Medical/Science was blue.

Nice!

Wow! Nice story! Thanks for the wild ride! Please, more "action" next chapter! And, more space-combat scenes. They are your strong point, so stick with them... It is like watching a movie free of charge!

Hey Man, when will you update this great story?

your new alae character is way cool. fun addition.

Nice work, but again please try and write longer chapters. Also, please take note, some parts of the story seem to be needing proof-reading.

Hello!! My Name is Bien Canonizado,I'm a visually-disabled (blind) graduate student from the Philippines. Just dropped by to express my admiration for your
writing-style... You are possibly one of the most skilled web-based authors that I have encountered in my time as a fanatic of fantasy/science fiction.
You should really try to finish your stories,specially this particular one that I am reviewing right now.
I am re-posting this review cause my old post was erased when some one hacked my old account.
You know,your writing means very much to me,recently
I just lost my sense of sight;and quite honestly it has been so hard adjusting to a life without being able to pick-up another printed book. Currently,I
depend on my computer to read stories to me on-line,this is with the help of a screen-reading program. And let me tell you,ever since I discovered fan-fiction
I couldn't stop reading your great stories! Please understand,your stories give me the strength to continue... (I'll not dwell on that fact too much.)
I believe your talents are a God-given gift so that you may bring happiness to those who value this particular genre.
So, Please, Please, Please, Please... Do not give up on this story...
Update faster!
My only wish is if you could make your chapters longer,I think the reader would have an easier time if the story were written in a few long chapters,rather than several short parts.
At least each chapter should be 3,0 words long for better continuity.
Easier for us to follow if we did not have to back-track so often because of short chapters. I hope that you will one day decide
to once-again write. Please don't give up...
I hope that you will reply,because it was very hard for me to write this review since I am hoping that you will notice this short letter out of all the others that you get.
Please do not think that I am just spammer,cause I am serious when I make this request.
If you wish to reply, please do not use the reply feature of this website,
instead please kindly send your comments to my e-mail
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"There are more things in heaven and earth Horatio,then are dreamt of in your Philosophy..."

My god, this is good! You should have more reviews! Just one thing though, make your chapters longer. they are too short.

Wow! I am absolutely gobsmacked by your story. It's sowell thought out and written and has excellent pace.

I'll certainly look forward to reading more.