i loved it

This has a lovely feel to it, a perfect oppressiveness. The opening quote was a beautiful choice. I enjoyed it.

Though I think you could have done more with it, it turned out very well. I like how the story was writen to imply certain things without acutally saying it.
I also think that it's interesting that Setsuna and Tieria seem to have different "gods" and that while Setsuna seems to seems to suffer from a lack of one, Tieria wants to escape/ break his.
^.^