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Reviews for: On the Ball
Miss Enthusiasimal
2009-11-01 . chapter 1
Goshness I love this fic... they should should totally have a flashback and then we could see cute itty bitty baby Charlie and Don that would be so cute
Bunny1
2009-10-15 . chapter 1
Aw... how adorable!:) I love these Numb3rs kid-fics;)
Valia
2009-03-20 . chapter 1
This story is so cute! I rather enjoyed it. I loved the beginning with Don intercepting the suspect. I also thought this line hilarious:
"Which was silly, cos Mommy's friends were grown-up ladies, not girls."
Great work with the story!
The North Wyn
2009-01-31 . chapter 1
Aww! This is adorable! Everyone's fabulously in character. I love the beginning--Don apprehending the suspect. Don later helping his dad hide all the evidence is hilarious! Don is such a great big brother to Charlie. You did a great job in writing the story with a little kid's voice. This was a thoroughly enjoyable and cute story. Going to my favs!
infra-reddrama5
2008-12-28 . chapter 1
aw this story's so cute. I actually read it twice. Did you write anymore fics from when they were younger or know any one who did? They' re my fave. Really great job.
Solitaire42
2008-11-21 . chapter 1
E! Aw! OHMYGOSH! Killed with the adorable!!
QuickenMyEnd
2008-11-16 . chapter 1
aww, very nice!
Water-Soter
2008-10-27 . chapter 1
Aw, that was just too cute for words! I love big brother Don and conspiring Alan. Heh! Nice story!
mia-dcwut-09
2008-09-06 . chapter 1
lol
i love younger charlie and younger don
so cute
Kiki Cabou
2008-09-04 . chapter 1
Oh, My, God. Lil' Donnie Eppes, for the win. This was the kind of adorable that causes hand-clapping laughter and a warm blush in your cheeks, because you can see it happening in your mind's eye and it just melts your heart. "Shocalit." Ha ha! This was perfect. I also must give you special kudos for the awesome dialogue. (I loved Alan's comment about Charlie saying "water" with a NY accent.) Too cute! Great job. :)
Rhapsodista
2008-09-01 . chapter 1
Holy cow...that was the very definition of adorable. I don't know what it is about this show and these characters, but I just LOVE imagining Don and Charlie as little kids. And what an image this was! Little Charlie, with chocolate all over his face...too cute! Great job with the vernacular of a child, by the way..."Shocalit" just made me smile like crazy. "Shalie dood boy" took me a few seconds, until I just stopped thinking about it and said it out loud. :) I also liked that you referred to Alan as "Daddy" throughout--definitely kept it clearly from Don's perspective. Speaking of Don, it looks like Alan SHOULD be worried...he definitely covered all the bases! And you called it perfectly right from the start--Don is SO the best big brother in Pasadena!

Still smiling. Can't help it. Thanks for this!
Ms.GrahamCracker
2008-09-01 . chapter 1
Who could resist the image of toddler Charlie in bib overalls holding out chocolate covered hands to hug the best big brother in Pasadena. Not me. Very cute. Thanks for sharing.
Whispering Darkness
2008-09-01 . chapter 1
Aw! Little Don and Charlie are so adorable! Very cute ficlet, it put a huge smile on my face. Thanks for writing!
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