Ah, another verse! Always worth reading of course and although it seems churlish to criticize I'd like to make a suggestion. Personally I think 'flame' would be a good substitute for 'candle' as the breeze would extinguish the flame but leave the candle behind. I'd drop 'It's' before the splendid 'a blot on the perfection of the sky' as I think it scans better. Not sure about the line 'A soothing of a tool of man'. Not altogether sure I'm getting it but it doesn't flow as well as the rest of the verse. Like the end very much. More please!

wow... Very good!

O! Good one! xx