I'd like to read more. :-)

An excellent start! Waiting for more!

Wow, what an intriguing start. Please continue soon!

Haha! Excellent start! I loved this first chapiter and can't wait to read a second and third and...

A promising start It could do with proof-reading as there are a lot of typoes, but it's well-written and interesting.

I find this story to be very interesting, and pleasant to read. Keep smiling. :-)