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   megumisakura 9/8/08 . chapter 6awsome,update! |
| Blushing.white.rose 9/7/08 . chapter 6 aw. Babies! sweet chapter. Liked Hellboy's reaction to Manning, very HB. Can't wait for more! |
| psyche b. mused 9/6/08 . chapter 2 Hi there, First, I think you have an interesting story going here! I have to agree with a previous review that noted some mechanical difficulties, though. The run-on sentences and confusing places are completely correctable, but they're so pervasive that they do detract from the story. Seeing something like that in your own work can be really tough, though (you know exactly what you're trying to say, so should everyone else). I have that problem myself, so I'm far from perfect. I'm sure that if you found a beta the readability would improve, and the great parts of the story itself would shine through. psyche b. |
| BlueEyedGunSlinger 9/4/08 . chapter 4 Hey! I love this story! Abe is so cute, and Belle is an awesome character. I can't wait to see what you come up with next! |
| megumisakura 9/3/08 . chapter 4 update! |
| megumisakura 9/3/08 . chapter 3 update! update! |
| megumisakura 9/3/08 . chapter 2 update! awsome story! |
| Kima-Mitsura 9/3/08 . chapter 1 My apologies for not reading this story as far as you had written, but there are a few things I must point out. 1. Run-on sentences are everywhere. Please fix this. 2. You are not entirely clear on what's going on. You have plenty of details, but too many to make sense. & 3. What dialogue you wrote does not sound like the characters at all. |
