wow very good story ,i think it took lots of time to write it, but do u have the story rather dark i want to have it.

so if u have it plzz send it to

right hand salute
and out good night

well-written this time around, and an obviously well-planned plot. It was a good read, and the direction it took was a nice surprise.

Excellent alternative ending. What makes it work is that you can go with either story as each obey the logic of the situation.

As usual a great 'bunny' taken care of by the fabulous Captain, but I was a bit disappointed in the happy ending in this sequel.
We all have to agree that anyone that would formulate a plan as heinous as this one getting rid of Kimmie for personal gain is one sick puppy, eh?
Well, you should have gone the route of having Kim actually die that horrible death in the cistern, and let Tara and Ron get married and settle in that very same house.
Could have expanded from the basis of Poes' "Cask" story and shifted to another of his stories "The telltale heart" type of scenario.
We knew that Taras' "cheese had slid off of her cracker" by her killing Kim in the first place...
I would have set the scene of her killing Ron too because she was haunted by the 'spirit' of Kim.
She would see KP manifest herself in other people, and one cool example would be Tara finally flipping out completely by a last confrontation with 'Kim' and she winds up plunging a sharp pair of scissors into Kim's heart to finally be rid of her... only for Tara to finally realize she actually stabbed Ron.

E!

Or if you really wanted to twist the thing into utter darkness, have the person Tara stabs and kills their only child. YOW!

If you want to write a dark tale based on Poe-type stuff, get DARK and CREEPY and to heck with the fluffy happy endings.

Yeah, I know... this would REALLY creep out your fans, Cap. But if you write stuff like this, go for the jugular... MUUWAHAAHA!

RD

great story, an amazing follow up to the first one ^^

Okay, the scene with Bonnie... freaky.

So Tara is discovered, with all the evidence pointing her way. She can't even speak, she's gone in the head losing everything she worked for.

At least Kim and Ron get a happy ending here, though it wasn't easy. Nicely done.

I remember the original story (I even read it again to make sure) so this was a pleasant surprise.

As someone who is trying to get into law enforcement, the backpack was the hole in the plan. And the dumping of it was very careless on Tara's part...

Not saying you wrote it bad or anything like that (quite the opposite), there is never any 'perfect crime'. Period.

As a added note, reading this story with Johnny Cash's 'Gods gonna cut you down' playing really puts Taras fate into perspective...

Sooner or later gotta cut you down...

Very interesting... but not a bad re-do of the original. Of course you only hope that things work out for those two. Quite the Poe-esque little tale you gave a bright and dark ending at the same time.

Yeah, for Kim to recover, she'd have to take the steps she took for her to have closure in her mind. And with her Ron beside her, her true hero, she will.

Tara, on the other hand, can't see the other side of that wall she now lives behind.

CB73

Great job here, Captain! I'm glad you finally finished this. Tara being insane- that's a twist, although she did seem a little off base in the first story. Thank you so much for finishing!

Well done, Captain!

It isn't easy to come back to a story like this so long after and write a different outcome. You had left only the one loophole. Think how hard this would be if she had incinerated the evidence and put the air bottle back.

Kudos!

Thomas

Again, awesome job. Great stuff here, and cool scenes; especially good job on Kim's captivity scenes.

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Keep the good writing.

I can't say I'm disappointed.

Great stories! Both of them.

I don't see where everybody gets this... 'disturbing' thing from. Don't get me wrong they're both dark, but not quite so disturbing. Or maybe it's just me...

Oh, well. Keep it up!

She should have burned the backpack!! But wait, the airtank is metal... huh, she coulda put it back then?

Glad Kim Possible lived, sad that Tara did that in the first place. You are one sick, twisted, demented author, but I love your stuff just the same!

wow i just read the first one and i was kinda creeped out. i gotta ask, how long did it take you to think of Tara's plan? well this did bring a happy ending to the whole thing and it still kinda creeps me out.

Much better ending. I can finally erase this horrible ending (previous story) and replace it with a good one. Sigh. I'm extremely happy with this ending. Shame for Tara...It just not believable...innocent Tara...Well, until next time.

Danny