I like that this is fragmented- that it doesn't really rhyme. The repetition of "still I had you" is very strong, very heartfelt. The feeling I get is that Rodney was absolutely tortured by Jennifer's death; it's palpable.

I think the ending, though not in the same rhythm could display the urgency he felt and that he was running out of time to fix what had gone wrong. I think the poem would have been stronger for the basic, technical point, but it is lovely none the less!

Keep at it!

It's nice!

this was lovely.

This is a sweet little piece.

Favorite bit:

"The kindest soul ever born to Earth,

you loved me more than I deserved.

In a world gone ever more mad,

you were all I needed, all I had."

Sums up Rodney right there.