PLease please please update. I hope that you continue this story, I really want to see what happens next.
-kate

Looks like you're off to a good start with this.

good first chapter. update soon

ok. here's what i thought. it's good that you went back to past tense. it isn't awkward anymore. there are still grammatical errors here and there and wrong usage of words, but all in all it's alright and i do know that English isn't your native language. it's also good that there's no sudden KiGo in it and the flow didn't feel out of place. you have an interesting plot and the pace isn't so rushed anymore unlike your previous stories. the only downside for me is that i get confused what's really happening, the explanation about the eight personalities compared to Yamato no Orochi and others, and the fact that the Ron-Kim 'break up' wasn't so believable. But besides that, it was good.

Good job. you're improving. looking forward to your next chapter.

i love it and make it 5 so it can be posted sooner!! lol please please please update soon

kitty =^_^=

Haven't heard 4m u in a long while.
I like this, its different.
Update please

This is good'"! Update soon!

Damn it! I haven't logged in for ages! Silly thing!
Yay!! SAM!! YOU ARE BACK! *Hugs* Oh My dear! I missed you!
*Cookies!!*
yaY!! You have to send me a email or something some time! Or this thing will be...well...long...Anyways! Love this so far...Can't wait for more!
YaY!
Well See ya around Sam! Bye for now!!
Take Care My Dear!!

Becky Silver Black