|Reviews for My Savior|
| tinky punk 9/11/10 . chapter 1
okay! so i reviewed now worship me? ihaha . just kidding. nice story dude. but they could have talked a little bit more.
| thecolorcoral 6/12/10 . chapter 1
yes yes PLEASE do Alice's POV! this fic is gorgeous and wonderful and i'd LOVE to see Alice's view. most fics are Jasper's POV, doting on Alice, and it's great to read her love for HIM. So, yes please!
| enchanted-mind 3/21/10 . chapter 1
True that this may have been a light, fluffy story about Alice and Jasper, but it was definitely good. I loved the simplicity of the concept and how you just brought out the best of it with your words. And your writing is great too (just thought I would throw that out there) because you don’t get lost in a jungle of words and epic sentences.
I really liked you juxtaposition of opposites, they added a painful (in a good way) touch to the exploration of Jasper as a character. So for example, “I no longer saw them as food, but I also didn't spend a majority of my time with them” works really well because you contrasted the ideas. I loved it!
And the scars! Well, what can I say? You painted a perfect picture in my mind about how Jasper feels about them. Utterly flawless. Perfect. True to his character. I always wondered whether or not Jasper had been self-conscious about them when around the Cullens – because Bella never saw that – and you clearly had the same thought. And, in all honesty, through your weaving of words, you were able to put it better than I ever could have!
(Please forgive my disjointedness as I move to the next point... :D)
My favourite line was this:
“Regardless of why I existed, I had my theories, and they all revolved around Alice. My savior. My protector.” It summed up everything beautifully and portrayed so much in such a simple phrase.
And the ending, as per the ‘fluff’ story code, was tremendously sweet and heart warming.
One other thing that I particularly liked was the fun element in the beginning. Even though Rose and Emmett were mentioned only briefly, they still added a bit of fun (and a giggle – I’ll confess) to the story. Also, “Just something Alice would get. Something we don't need.” added that little extra lightness to things so we didn’t get caught up in heavy sorrow or unrealistic hilarity. Yeah, so in short, you incorporated humour expertly – something I, as a fellow writer, esteem.
Huh... what else can I talk about...? Your writing style is admirable, the ideas were presented coherently and colourfully, the imagery was strong... I don’t think I can keep talking like this or you’ll end up with a complete essay full of rambles!
So thanks for writing this story – I liked it a lot – and I hope you find this review helpful, or at least worth the time it took to read.
Bye for now!
| Cool-as-icecream 8/4/09 . chapter 1
you are a very good writer I do think u should do Alice's POV.
| Frailly 5/28/09 . chapter 1
Wow, good story, i like it alot
| Little Miss Mary Alice Cullen 4/1/09 . chapter 1
aw so sweet! I LOVED IT!
| Realynn8 2/5/09 . chapter 1
This was really good.
| Tsuki no Rin 1/30/09 . chapter 1
Simple, neat, lovely. )
| Bella's Bff 1/21/09 . chapter 1
Loved it, yo.
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| TheLondonUnderground 1/17/09 . chapter 1
Aw, what a cute story. Alice and Jasper are one of my favorite couples. I'll have some more pancakes with extra fluff please! :]
| twilighter 12/29/08 . chapter 1
that was so soog! it was better than good it was "utterly perfect"! it sounded like a book. it was like it was jasper writing it! great job!
please please please do the story in alice's pov!
| kaitlynhale135 12/19/08 . chapter 1
| danni 12/18/08 . chapter 1
| reader13 10/26/08 . chapter 1
aw, so sweet...
| Ha-LoCo 10/11/08 . chapter 1
I love how cute Alice and Jasper are. I haven't read many fanfics about them and this showed their relationship perfectly!