If you keep writeing I will keep reviewing. Hope to see an update soon.

As if Eragon itself wasn't bad enough. This isn't fanfiction, this is just Eragon with the names switched out and some minor details changed. You're story is even less original than Eragon, and that's saying something!

Well at least Eragon had proper spelling and grammar. As Wandering Critic said below, a beta reader wouldn't help, in fact a beta would probably go mad trying to find and repair all your mistakes.

You seem to have trouble with present tense vs. past tense, adjective vs. noun.

Some of your dialogue was so overwhelmingly awful I laughed out loud, the same goes for more than a couple bits of your prose.

You really don't need to put all caps to show someone shouting, I think we can understand that they are shouting, and all caps just looks unprofessional and immature. Try to keep to one punctuation mark, it's like the all caps thing, you don't need two exclamation points to show someone shouting. There are run-on sentences galore.

The term "hang out" is a modern day phrase and doesn't belong in a pseudo-fantasy world.

Overall, this is some of the worst grammar and spelling I've ever seen in fanfiction. If you're really as old as you let on than I fear for the future of this world. I'll bet if I told my cousin to write a story it wouldn't have half the problems this story has. And my cousin is in the 1st grade.

OK... just let me know where to find it.

Jessem: The Wandering Critic DID have to read it in order to decide whether or not s/he would enjoy it. The review points out whether s/he really did, and it explained those reasons pretty clearly.

To the author: I'll second the motion that Wandering Critic has hit the nail on the head and has advice that's worth taking to heart. If you don't know how to communicate your ideas clearly and effectively, you'll never learn how to tell a good story through writing. It helps to learn at least the basic rules of your language choice, and completely dispensing with concepts like spelling and punctuation indicates that you really don't care about what you're writing.

Once you have that under your belt, try putting some effort into describing your characters and setting—appearances, gestures, individual quirks, minor actions paired with the dialogue, etc. All I'm getting out of this story is a cookie cutter fantasy epic with the names of characters from your favorite show thrown in for no particular reason, not a Sailor Moon fanfic of any kind. Usagi and Rei may as well have been Haruka and Michiru (or Eragon and Arya, natch), and this change wouldn't have any impact on the story at all.

Also consider why you're even crossing over Sailor Moon and Eragon in the first place. Is there anything truly interesting you can do with this concept, any reason to do this apart from maybe being a fan of both canons and feeling compelled to mash them together?

Some quick snippets of advice:

1) Pick a title that relates specifically to the story, rather than a generic statement that could apply to any one of a hundred thousand romance stories.

2) Speaking of the title, check that it's spelled right at the beginning of a chapter.

3) People's names should start with capital letters, except maybe in text messages.

4) Wandering Critic's advice is worth listening to. Stories with confusing or inconsistent grammar and punctuation are difficult to read and generally give the impression that the author didn't put much effort into them, making them not worth reading.

It is true that Wandering Critic was right about the spelling and grammar mistakes BUT you (Wandering Critic) didn't have to be so rude and condescending! Everyone here just wants to write their fics and have people read and enjoy. who gives a flying crap if there are spelling mistakes and some grammar gone wrong. and honestly how sad are you to make such a big effort to write such a rude and insulting review, because frankly if YOU didn't enjoy it YOU did not have to READ it you pompous jerk.

Totally loving it! I want more! lol.

No, your story isn't better than your summary. In fact, your summary (complete with misspelled words, misused words, terrible punctuation, wrong capitalization when it exists at all, and n00bspeek is) is, in fact, a very accurate preview of the illiterary disaster that is your story. If you can't write a 50-word summary without looking ignorant, what makes you think you should be trying to write a whole story?

To hit a few of the major problems (imagine your new third-grade teacher with a red pen and an angry glare):

People's names should be capitalized.

Always end sentences with periods.

Past and present are not the same thing, and should not be mixed in the same sentence.

One exclamation point at the end of a sentence (if it is in fact an exclamation) is quite sufficient. Likewise for one question mark.

This sentence no verb. Some of yours the same.

Learn the difference between adjectives and nouns. For instance, patience is a noun, patient is an adjective. Also learn the difference between adjectives and adverbs. For instance, eager is an adjective, eagerly is an adverb.

Change does not mean the same thing as changed. Trap does not mean the same as trapped. Slam does not mean the same as slammed. Pass does not mean the same as passed.

How come everyone starts to do things, but never finishes? All three of them start to fight. Makoto started rushing to her. Usagi started killing the urgals. Their animal companions started to help them fight. They all start .,. but never finish. Why can't they just DO things, instead of always only starting them?

The comma is your friend. Well, okay, you are clearly not even on speaking terms with the comma, and in fact it looks like you haven't been introduced, but the comma should be your friend.

How can people gasp out these incredibly long run-on sentences without slowing down? Try saying "Just to let you know I have never regretted taking this mission and our time all three of us are together but the only regret that I have is that I will never again spend more time when all three of us are together and get to see the end of this war to finally experience peace with you…" in one breath and see if you can finish it without turning blue.

This is not rocket science. This is stuff anyone should have learned before they got out of elementary school. Since you obviously didn't, I have to wonder whether you are even old enough to have a FFN account in the first place. If you aren't the primary-school child you appear to be from your writing, and you are actually 13 or older, you should be embarrassed to present something like this to the world as the best you can do.

Read my writing website (link in profile) for some basic information on things like punctuation and capitalization. That might help. But there's not much I can do for someone who doesn't even understand the difference between past tense and present tense, between singular and plural, and other equally basic concepts.

A beta reader won't help; he or she would have to do more of the writing in this story than you did. You need remedial English classes. You need them very, very badly.

I always love reading reixusa fics and this one seems promising! update soon! i would love to find out whats happening to usa and what rei's gonna do next! :)

Well, I do like the idea... Rei being in Eragon's place and Usagi en Arya's... though I'd love to see how was Rei's childhood in your fic, and how will Rei and Usagi actually meet and interact.

Is your fic movie based or book based? And will Rei and Usagi meet at any time Eragon and the others? or are they by themselves in this storyline?