 Chiriko-chan 11/13/01 . chapter 1 *crying* Very Good! Congratulations. It's written well, as you can actually imagine him sitting there thinking this as he was dying, very good part on the use of proper form, because alot of fanfiction writers would do this, and have alot of spelling errors and do something like "yeah, I really always have luved hur" which you could never see Hotohori doing, even of he was drunk. Although, next time you write something like this, don't put the 'The End' at the end of it, as it was written well enough to let you know that that was the end without it being there. Never Stop Writing!
-Chiriko-chan |