First of all, I'd like to tell two certain reviewers that one can make a satire of something without hating it. I love The Redwall Series. Do I find it repetitive? Yes. Do I find this fic insightful? Not really, because I realized all of this stuff already. But Inky Pirate is making valid points, and is the first to do so. Be nice.

Now Then, I liked this chapter alot. Satire is always welcome.

WOAHAHAHAHAHA! THIS IS SO FUNNY!

Peter seems like one of the know-it-all type, but I like him!

~Foeseeker~

LMBO!
That is soo hilarious!!
I hate Martin, though... to me he seems... god-modeled.
And for Redwall everything is like what your story is...
Like: "Once upon a time everything is peaceful at Redwall. A random hare from Salamandastron randomly comes and sings songs. Some bad vermin screws up a few things, the Guosim shrews and the Skipper and his bunch of otters come and save everyone, a few unnamed one dies, everything is happily ever after, blah blah blah..."

I love your sarcasm and wit in this satire. It seriously made me laugh out loud. I thought the funniest part was when Peter felt sorry for Daisy because she had to marry "that bastard". I love this and I really couldn't agree more- especially at that part where Shonrad says that being a mouse automatically makes him righteous.

~Jade TeaLeaf

P.S. Are you going to add any "non-farmers" anytime soon? It would be really interesting how you portray them.

Baby talking is normal for young children, the same would apply to young talking animals, ever think of that? No book is perfect, but you don't have to write a full, long-winded STORY about it. Everyone has a different writing style, and if you don't like the book, then why waste your time writing fanfiction for it? This is not meant to be an insult, but that does imply that you have no life.
Just because Mr. Jaques didn't writee about it ranning doesn't mean it doesn't rain, some things are meant to be taken for granted

Well it's nice to see a unique story, finally! I wonder about stuff like that myself sometimes and it's nice to read from someone with a similar point of view. Keep writing, since I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

~Jade TeaLeaf

is this ment as an anti-redwall fic, or are you just venting?

Ah, The Redwall Formula. Never fails. You should do a Salamandastron side of the story.
Also, please mention something about Martin being a showoff by making every single solitary thing a riddle. That always annoys the crap out of me.

Hehe, this is well-written and funny.

I noticed the same thing about 6 books in...I was like, "Hey, there's basically a Redwall formula." Good to know I'm not alone.