Nice!

It was damn good!...now if only you had made it longer...

aw thats cute very good job ;D

Nice. I love it!

I loved it :D

i like it a lot good work

I just don't know what to say except that this is better than the stories from more experanced writers, in short, I loved it, great format.

Your story, was very very good, but a little bit too short, i think. Looking forward to your other stories

...SpeechLess...[it was awesum]

MAh! No! It had some potential I guess, but it just went downhill. I couldn't stand reading the first part so I skipped it. It was to monotone. "First he did this, and then he did this and then he reacted like this." It had no voice. Lee and Garra were so OOC. Garra wouldn't be so...meh... like a staight guy and Lee would be much to shy to even yell out a "Fuck yes" or want Garra to come in him. Aie! Try harder!

sand penetration jutsu!?!? thats AWESOME! LUVED IT! keep writing! (well actualy typing but you know what i mean) ^_^

I love it \o/!

So cute! And with uke Lee *o*!

And don't worry, it was very good! ^-^~!

You should do more of that! Hohoho! *crazy laugh* \èoé/

Well, I don't have anything more to say .. soo, bye! \o

pretty good. not all that bad. u kind of rushed it a bit. try reading some fan fics that other people wrote to help u with ur sentences. some of them r slightly akward.