 2008-10-02 . chapter 3 This is seriously like the twentieth time I've tried to review this fic... the window keeps closing out on me. :'[ We'll see what happens this time.
Now on to the new 'episode'!
I enjoyed this a lot! Matilda seems to me like one of those wonderfully crazy old women that pretty much everyone loves... I hope she'll be able to get her books back!
I find it a bit strange that the brownies would seem so fearful of Angela when she came, even though it was her that they were seeking. Why would they tear apart the house?... that would only make Angela angrier at them! xD
Honestly, that's all I can say since there really wasn't that much to the chapter. This new dragon does seem formidable though... I'm interested to see how that goes later on.
Update when you can, of course!
Yours in fiction,
YFWE |
 Riza-san 2008-09-28 . chapter 3Nice chapter. Heh, Spoof reminds me of Spud a lot. I love the way you layout the story as if it was really on TV. I don't see it often in fanfiction, but it's a unique and good thing to do by my opinion. As I use to learn Italian, I could understand quite a bit of it. The internet translator didn't do such a bad job. I also think that this story has a lot of potential and deserves a lot more reviews that it currently has. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, update soon please! |
 Riza-san 2008-09-25 . chapter 2Good chapter. You're a very good writing. Heh, Spoof is awesome. I guess in some way he reminds me of a Spud XD Anywho, yeah, I always refer back to Animorphs when I hear the word 'morph' too. I never grew out of Animorphs -_- Anyway, great chapter. I'm looking forward to the next one! |
 YFWE 2008-09-15 . chapter 2First and foremost: good God, that's a lot of characters! But man, you certainly seem to have put a lot of time and effort into creating them all.
Something I thought of while you were introducing everyone, though: if the dragon gene skipped Jake's mom, would it not have skipped Jake's children as well? Not that I really care, or anything, because watching Jake's children is far more interesting than watching his grandchildren.
So here we go with my particularly long review (get used to it, it's all I give anyone. :] )
If I can be perfectly honest, I didn't think the theme song at the beginning was highly necessary, that is, unless you are trying to model this after the TV series in every which way possible. I've personally never been a fan of that sort of thing. Doesn't mean I won't read it, though. Rest assured, I will read it.
Haha, everytime she says 'morph,' I shall have to refer back to the Animorphs series as well... those were certainly the days.
Suzy Wolf. Oh, how I love irony. That sort of thing can make me laugh for days. Just like when people give Rose the last name of 'Hunter.' Irony. :]
I do hope the other characters come in soon. Not that I have anything against Angela or the others by any means! The other characters just sound quite interesting, and at this point I really cannot wait to see them make an appearance.
Wonderful first chapter, I really enjoyed it. I hope you'll update soon, and if you have time, check out some of the other fics in the section... ADJL writers are absolutely awesome, as in 'They might eat your face' awesome. You'll surely see what I mean.
Yours in fiction,
YFWE |