Found "One Trick Pony" yesterday and loved it... rough around the edges for grammar, but a wonderful story overall...

The same goes for this one but many less errors and your writing style has improved as well...

I don't see any major problems with the SM continuity... you avoid most of the time-line problems by placing them after the end of the series and the date of the actual impact was (to my knowledge) never mentioned in cannon. personality wise you have some hiccups though, unless you have had the inners age a few years and mature somewhat during that time, though a reference to grab onto would be welcome as to establish a more accurate time-line for them

For those still wondering how long it has been since the end of OTP, my guess is 17-18 years using Ranko's age as a measure (The end of OTP states that Ranko was born 9 months after Ranma and Kasumi moved out of the Tendo Compound), and the references to Ranma and Kasumi being in their 40's is including their time in "Yesterday", as they would only be in their LATE 30's if my guess on the time-line is correct.

I was right I did finish it the day after. Your writing's improved upon OTP and my critique stops there, I guess that's the problem with school you're forced to write about things you hate and so you hate English and then you find something you love and you're lacking the skills...

It's a little disheartening to see that there hasn't been an update in seven months when the time between the 1st and 3rd chapters was 6 months but, c'est la vie. As long as of course we do see updates I'd hate to see this story sit incomplete :(

I am soo glad you decided to start up a sequel!

Oh, my. Jumping to conclusions, are we, girls?

Please keep up the wonderful story.

Nice concept, I hope this story doesn't drag on like 'One trick pony' did. I like your characterization of Ranma's children. and the way Ranma and Kasumi were interacting with the Amazon, although their reasoning for not taking the children with them seems to contradict events in 'One trick pony'.

Looking forward for more of this.

The Unicorn

lets see where this goes its piques my intrest

i love ranma kasumi fanfics

Wonderful story, keep up the good work.

For the most part it's good. Though it lacks content on the fight scenes. I dislike when writers drag on-and-on about punches and kicks anyways, but it would still be nice to hear their thoughts, feel their emotions, and perhaps to know how it ended.

None the less, I can tell it'll still be great without it. I've seen people manage an action story without much detail on the action.

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Instead of just author fiat, you could say that Ranma and Kasumi are having the visions as a side effect of the technique they used to get home: they are now more inb tune with the world's Ki than the average person. In fact, the world had to "catch up" to them, explaining the reason the dreams are of the future instead of the present.

Well this story is well written but it does not compare with the One trick Pony in terms of originality .

so far it a good story, waiting to see what happens next.

Really enjoying the story, may writers block be forever banished from your presence! Just wish it could come out faster.

P.S. You arent intending to use the trees to store up energy from various sources for use as one big blast at the meteor are you? It'd be kinda obvious, unless it's used in an unexpected way, so please, surprise me?

great story and chapter. I am looking forward to Ranma and Kasumi meeting the Senshi. Keep up the good work and update soon.

even for Setsuna, that was damn low.

I like it and cant wait to read more. Keep going. and why do i get the feeling that Hotaru will eventually side with Ranma and his family...after all they care for her probably as much as Michiru, Haruka and Setsuna do. Hell they even fixed some of her problems