MORE! That is all I can say! I love this story!

What a marvelous story, I hope it never ends

[ch1-17] the whole story is exelent i loved it . when is chapter 18 coming ... please reply if you have info .

This is realy good. I hope to see a new chapter soon.

Plz continue! Also can u plz draw the krikis so i know what it looks like? ( I might draw some fanart of it)

I do vaguely remember this story from a while ago... To say nothing of how late I seem to be in reviewing, I will say that this chapter was a bit... Disjointed? It seemed that the action, while it didn't move at a breakneck pace, sacrificed transitions in order to move things along more quickly.

That, or I accidentally skipped several paragraphs.

In any case I do feel that the Krikis kicking Samus would/should not have resulted in that much damage to the suit. I'll assume that it's about as big as any other big monster she's fought. It might have powerful legs/muscles but, even so, canonically the suit has likely survived bigger traumas. (For example, getting knocked into the elevator shaft in Prime, getting smacked by a falling Omega Pirate's corpse, etc.) And in those instances the suit seemed to either come out fine or sacrifice its 'extra' functions in order to preserve its basic purpose of being Samus' defense/offense system. Functions such as Morph Ball, Bombs, etc. could have been temporarily disabled, allowing the suit more power to do its main job.

Other than that I don't have many qualms about the chapter, outside of the fact that the emperor and Dane died quite suddenly. Not a lot of buildup was there for their deaths, which could've been useful in making this particular arc of the story more memorable. Unless it's not about to end soon, but the point still stands.

Anyway! Hopefully I can pick back up on things here and provide more substantial feedback in future because I do think that this story has good potential. It's not 'the best' as it is now, but with a good amount of effort I'm sure it can be built into something fantastic. :)

My God this stories great. Its something you never think about, but the Pirates could be the good guys here. The way it waas described seems legitly possible. Unlike the other fics about Samus and Ridley/Space Pirates teaming up. Please update more often.

Really like what you're going for here, and I really do like post-fusion Ridley and Samus teaming up fics. It'd be really cool if it happened in a game, but alas, it's simply too awesome for canon.

The only things I'm concerned about is that you might be trying too hard to make it too similar to game mechanics where it stops making that much sense. The other issue is that you should probably vary your pronouns more (instead of using "she" all the time to refer to Samus) in order to make it a bit more interesting to read.

I look forward to your next chapter. :)

Nice chapter. I do not mind the shortness of it because well... it's a great story and short chapters are needed for some parts of a great story. Keep working on this story man.

Great story so far, can't wait for the next chapter (cept this chapter was from two years ago ) but I am mad at you for taking my idea for the melee weapon! I didn't think of a beam like sword but I thought samus needed some sort of melee weapon for when she's cornered, I even had controls for the wii planned out. Aw well you published the idea first so u win... great plot, and thanks for leaving out the romance

Ah, I wouldn't expect any kind of relationship like that, no. So far so excellent though, in terms of your story.

One thing I've noticed though that keeps a-poppin' up in Metroid stories: the Galactic Federation being corrupt and Samus trying to bring about it's downfall...often siding with the Space Pirates. For one, this means siding with a race of xenocidal enslaving monsters who are willing to shoot their own kind in the back over being afraid to face a foe. That in itself is madness, to destroy a monster by siding with another monster.

But even if Samus DOES bring down the GF, has she forgotten how many planets the entire Federation makes up? How many planets they protect or trade with? Hundreds, thousands maybe! She's going to allow all those innocent people to suffer just so she can get some petty revenge?

Besides, it doesn't follow that all of the government is in it solely for their own personal gain. There are probably many people who joined the Galactic Federation because they believed they could make some kind of difference, the same way people join the army out of a sense of patriotism, a desire to protect people. Is she going to cut down an entire orchard just because of a few dozen apples at the biggest tree IN said orchard? That's just stupid and destructive. The whole universe would be thrown into chaos.

This, of course, leaves the question of "so what DOES she do"? Well, that's the rub, isn't it. She has to get creative. That's the whole point. Just blowing stuff up isn't going to work all the time for all the evil in the universe. Half the time it doesn't work at all. She'll have to find a new way...

About the lack of romance: THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU! I'm not a huge fan of that sort of fanfic , the only "romance" I can tolerate is some mild flirting; any more and I have to get out my All Purpose Extra Strength Brain Bleach.

Man, I wish Nintendo would make this into a game. Though preferably for the DS, so I could play it.

Great fanfic so far. I love your characterization of Ridley. Weavel is pretty awesome, too.

I like this story alot, it has a really good plot, some unexpected and amazing twists to the storyline. the characters all seem to retain thier respective personalities, i dont see nothing wrong with this story at all. all around this fanfic is truly a rare find on and for that i tip my hat to you.

sincerely,

Javilin Yamato