I really liked it. It was sweet and Tony was very much in character.

this is the second or third time I've read this and I still love it until now... i love the way tony was presented in the story and i hope that i'll get to read pieces like this from you again

Well then, CHERISH THIS FLAME! I'm just kidding, it was a really good piece of work, the characterization in particular was something to take pride in.

This is absolutely fantastic! I can’t believe I almost skipped this story. Your summary had me curious, but the opening paragraph really drew me in. Only Tony Stark could find a newborn baby an “ugly little thing” and still be a likeable character. :-)

Your characterization of Tony was one of the best I have read. You captured his intelligence, smugness, disinterest, and that sweet guy underneath incredibly well. It can’t be easy writing for a character that is almost as much an introvert as a womanizer, yet you make it look easy.

I was also really surprised by how much I liked Sarah. It was refreshing to see that she was a real kid; she was never too smart or too cute. The way she saved Tony’s handwritten note and put it in her special box is a great example. Her horror at his being capture broke my heart.

The birthday party scene was one of my favorites. Sarah rescuing Tony was adorable. Their conversation had me a bit nervous, though. I was afraid she might turn into a science genius and start talking shop with Tony. So many others would have run with that cliché. I’m so glad you avoided that; it’s definitely highlights your strength as a writer.

Their e-mails back and forth were fun. It’s amazing how so few words sent between them could say so much! One aspect I truly admire about Sarah is how she respected Tony’s space. Even though she had access to his lab, she never bothered him down there. There’s a part of me that really wanted to see her reaction to Tony in the Iron Man suit, but the way you handled it made for a much stronger story (hmm, is there any chance of getting a deleted scene?). ;-)

I laughed so hard when Tony said to Sarah: “You know, I did her once,” then goes on to tell her, “Oh, yeah. It was great,” before realizing he was talking to a fourteen-year-old. My first reaction was “Did he really say that??” A perfect Tony Stark moment! LOL

I could continue to gush over your story, but it’s getting late. If I have any complaints, it’s that the story had to end. Thank you for such an enjoyable read. :-)

You know Im more of hurt/comfort fan but I like stories like these a lot to. I think you wrote it really well and I really really really liked it. I think you could do like a multi-chapter story with this. You know maybe have the sae begging but like when Tony gets back he surprises Sarah or something and gets her to come live with him. I think that would be a really good story if you wrote it. But thats just my opinion. Anyway absolutly great work on the story. Keep up the good work.

Wow, I'm amazed! I loved it to pieces! Oh, Sarah does comlement him well.
~Cheers, luv Ari

Awesome story. I loved this so much, it was very well written.

So there is more right? I really enjoyed what you have wrote so far. Would be great if you can spin it out, maybe touching on important moments in Sarah's life.

I loved it, are you going to write more?

A pleasant surprise!

This is too cute... I love it!

I love it, very heartwarming, and Tony and the rest are completely in charater. Sarah is very likeable and NOT a Mary Sue, thnak God!
Hope you write more interesting stories soon.

Now this was a really nice One-Shot. Your style of writing rocks, as expected fom a writer of your reputation.
By the way, i think this Story has the Potential for an Epic, you know - Sarah as Tony's successor as Iron Man (uh...Iron Girl)
Anyway, great Story, keep it up.

Ryousanki

I enjoyed this - it was interesting and understated but not schmoopy: toal lack of Mary Sues to be seen!

High point: Rescuing Tony from the suck-ups at her birthday party.

You have reminded me how much I want to see this film again.

Cute story! I only just saw Iron Man a little while ago, so this was right on time. I like Sarah a lot, she's very cool, and Tony was spot-on.