I have no Tips for improvement because I think you wrote it very well. And since this story is a one-shot, none are required.
I would like to thank you for sharing your imagination with us readers. I'm not much of a reviewer because I don't know what to say other than I enjoyed reading your work of art.
I will tell you I have found an appreciation for Harry/Daphne pairings. And I liked that you did not go into detail with sex scenes. Thanks for that also.
Good luck on all your future works of art. And may your muse never leave you high and dry.
Wendy

Grand

great story if you ever have any ideas like this publish them

Another reason the Shrieking Shack is 'not the most haunted place in England' is that it, like Little Hangleton and Hogwarts, is in SCOTLAND . It is NOT in England! They are two different countries. Harry might have noticed that as he lives in England and goes to school in Scotland.
I suggest that before you try and tell a Scotsman that he is an Englishman you make sure your hospital insurance is up to date.
Do you live in that well known Canadian town called Los Angeles?

Wow! It was awesome!

A good, sick, enjoyable read. Liked the mention of Fawkes.

Great story! I had loads of fun reading ٸit! Thanks for sharing!

You **en blow dont ever write your ** again

OMG, this is an awesome one shot. Can't believe I hadnt read it yet.

Pretty damn good!!

I like the whole Daphne/ Harry thing... wasn't expecting it, but it was a good pairing.

Loved it! Did he get Dumbles though?

gotta love that ending...*sighes*

this story was fabulous! i really enjoyed it XD

erm, a very good story line, but I didn't think that it was entirely believable. Even though I know Harry went to Azkaban and that would change someone, he completly goes OOC. Very much so ... it just seemed a little odd to me, but other than that I really enjoyed this story.

I liked how you wrote Dumbledore in this (he is so manipulative!) but his ending line was a little too much.

Urgh, Hermione in this was also completly annoying! Marrying Percy ... what the hell was she thinking??

I really enjoyed the whole Malfoy situation and the ending with him was quite funny.

All in all, good story and I did enjoy it
-DL

awesome fic. Harry finally did what he should have from the beginning.

could you post a sequel with harry taking care of dumblydore?