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shadowdragon4444
2009-11-18 . chapter 20
You said it was almost done but you haven't updated in a few YEARS! Hurry up I hate cliff hangers that are so close to the end but take forever to be finished. Update ASAP!
Allie-grrl4
2008-11-05 . chapter 20
update soon
nighttimefreedom
2008-08-20 . chapter 20
great fic
really one of a kind story(never imagined voldemort as the 'sweet grandfather')
anyway update soon please
Kichino Sarafu
2008-06-24 . chapter 20
WAAH! *cries* Poor Harry!

This is such a tear-jerker! I can't wait for the next chapter.
crookshank17
2008-01-03 . chapter 3
very nice
crookshank17
2008-01-03 . chapter 1
good so far
SE
2007-06-02 . chapter 20
brilliant brillaent ch
OctoberThirtyFirst
2006-10-08 . chapter 20
It's a nice fic overall and your writing has improved so much since you started. Congrulations!!
When is this fic taken place? Because you've mentioned Sirius, it has to be either hols after 3rd or 4th year. And then again, Harry felt pain throught his scar and Voldy didn't burn to death so it's prob end of 4th... or something
I'm still really irked about the name Markous and I really don't know..
The beginning of the story really could use some cleaning up but it is ok since it was published in 2001. Oh and if you get time, please change the evaporatings into apparating. It's really weird reading "and then he just evaporated".
I also think that Harry would freak out more if he knew that Chris and Max were there to kidnap him. And why did Sirius tell him about the Gryffindor thing in a letter when 2 of Voldys people were in the house? Why didn't he use his wand? Was it because of the underage laws? But then there was DE...
One mistake here " He was going to be here at noon today!
Harry glanced at the clock. 10:36 p.m. Another hour and 30 minutes." Is it meant to be midnight instead of noon? ^^
Wow. I like how Dumbles was a DE but why did Voldy let him go and why would he be afraid of Dumble? Yea yea I know you just wanted a nice twist^^
Also like the fack that Vold's HP Grand-dad but that would mean he's also descended from Gryffindor... Or was it Harry's mother who had the blood.. And if Voldy's heir of Slyth, that would mean that Voldy isn't really the heir of Slyth (...gah) and Harry is. The he would be heir of 2 fouonders!! lol
So was prongs alive, in a dream world, dead, a ghost, dead but was able to talk to Harry..etc? How can he not know who Harry is when the are a near carbon copy of each other? ... Oh and who was the 1st deer/stag? I first thought it was James but then Prongs was startles when Harry gave his name and the other deer/stag was unfamiliar. Oh.. ^^ forest of peace and joy ^^ lol random idea..? Didn't think it did anything to the plot but then again, i'm not the author ^^
Liked how you portayed Voldie..bit too quick to love his long lost grand-son, the boy-who-lived, savior of the wizarding world and his arch-enemy whom he was trying to kill for the past few years.
As I said, good story overall and some great ideas. Add more detail to the plot and polish it up a bit. Be careful of gramma , spelling etc and keep up the good work.
parseltonge girl
2006-07-27 . chapter 1
kewl
TheGodfatheroftheBoyWhoLived
2006-07-01 . chapter 1
I really like this story and hope you update it sometime soon!
jen1234
2006-03-18 . chapter 20
this is so sad i mean voldemort is mean but u would think that he would just kill harry and it is so sad please keep writing and get the next chapter up really soon
littlewolf123
2006-03-02 . chapter 20
omg! So sad
storm tigeress
2006-02-25 . chapter 20
hey, this is awesome. cant wait for your next update. im glad you know where you are going to go with this, its hard to write without inspiration, but please, update soon! it would suck if you were to give it up now, if you only have a few chapters to go

anyway,
x stormtigeress
Mariel
2005-12-16 . chapter 20
hmm...i have a strange feeling that you've given up on this fic...
Just me
2005-11-17 . chapter 20
Update! Update! Update! Update! Update! This is so good story, that u must continue it. I wish to know how it all ends!
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