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Lahnny 3/28/12 . chapter 20
HEY! Please update! Please! Love your story! :)
amy 8/12/11 . chapter 20
I loved your story i think it was very good and unexpected please, please right some more and keep up the great work
Kate 5/8/11 . chapter 12
lol! i laughed out loud at dumbeldore saying "LEAVE HIM THE FUCK ALONE!"...ahahha :D i'm sure its not supposed to be funny, but its so out of character. lol :')

anyways, wonderful story btw
heaven's blade 9/15/10 . chapter 20
you haven't updated since 2005! Please update! Love the story!
Zack Hiwatari-Chan 4/6/10 . chapter 20
you may have not updated in 5 years but this is awesoem!
Alti'uin 11/18/09 . chapter 20
You said it was almost done but you haven't updated in a few YEARS! Hurry up I hate cliff hangers that are so close to the end but take forever to be finished. Update ASAP!
Allie-grrl4 11/5/08 . chapter 20
update soon
nighttimefreedom 8/20/08 . chapter 20
great fic

really one of a kind story(never imagined voldemort as the 'sweet grandfather')

anyway update soon please
Kichino Sarafu 6/24/08 . chapter 20
WAAH! *cries* Poor Harry!

This is such a tear-jerker! I can't wait for the next chapter.
crookshank17 1/3/08 . chapter 3
very nice
crookshank17 1/3/08 . chapter 1
good so far
SE 6/2/07 . chapter 20
brilliant brillaent ch
OctoberThirtyFirst 10/8/06 . chapter 20
It's a nice fic overall and your writing has improved so much since you started. Congrulations!

When is this fic taken place? Because you've mentioned Sirius, it has to be either hols after 3rd or 4th year. And then again, Harry felt pain throught his scar and Voldy didn't burn to death so it's prob end of 4th... or something

I'm still really irked about the name Markous and I really don't know..

The beginning of the story really could use some cleaning up but it is ok since it was published in 2001. Oh and if you get time, please change the evaporatings into apparating. It's really weird reading "and then he just evaporated".

I also think that Harry would freak out more if he knew that Chris and Max were there to kidnap him. And why did Sirius tell him about the Gryffindor thing in a letter when 2 of Voldys people were in the house? Why didn't he use his wand? Was it because of the underage laws? But then there was DE...

One mistake here " He was going to be here at noon today!

Harry glanced at the clock. 10:36 p.m. Another hour and 30 minutes." Is it meant to be midnight instead of noon?

Wow. I like how Dumbles was a DE but why did Voldy let him go and why would he be afraid of Dumble? Yea yea I know you just wanted a nice twist

Also like the fack that Vold's HP Grand-dad but that would mean he's also descended from Gryffindor... Or was it Harry's mother who had the blood.. And if Voldy's heir of Slyth, that would mean that Voldy isn't really the heir of Slyth (...gah) and Harry is. The he would be heir of 2 fouonders! lol

So was prongs alive, in a dream world, dead, a ghost, dead but was able to talk to Harry..etc? How can he not know who Harry is when the are a near carbon copy of each other? ... Oh and who was the 1st deer/stag? I first thought it was James but then Prongs was startles when Harry gave his name and the other deer/stag was unfamiliar. Oh.. forest of peace and joy lol random idea..? Didn't think it did anything to the plot but then again, i'm not the author

Liked how you portayed Voldie..bit too quick to love his long lost grand-son, the boy-who-lived, savior of the wizarding world and his arch-enemy whom he was trying to kill for the past few years.

As I said, good story overall and some great ideas. Add more detail to the plot and polish it up a bit. Be careful of gramma , spelling etc and keep up the good work.
parseltonge girl 7/27/06 . chapter 1
kewl
TheGodfatheroftheBoyWhoLived 7/1/06 . chapter 1
I really like this story and hope you update it sometime soon!
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