This is so artfully written, and everyone is in character~! I love it! You did surprise me a little, what with McGuirk and Paula being together and all. They do seem like a pretty intesting couple. Bringing in a new child, Jesse, was also a delightful surprise. Brendon seems like a good big brother...

I bet you anything it would rocket in popularity though, if you were to somehow fit Dwayne and his band in the next chapter? They seem to be very popular characters.

Yay! Aw this is so cute and good! Except the sudden transition of POVs is weird. You should at least put a line between them, or a -9 Years Later- or however many years it was. But yeah, I really like this a lot. :D

VERY AWESOME!! But where the chipmunks or chipettes? do brendon and jesse and Melissa, represent them? I am a bit confused but I still get the whole story and stuff but yeah GREAT JOB
! I LOVE IT!! YOU ROCK1!LoL! :):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)


-Kaleigh!

VERY VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT! UPDATE SUPER SOON PLEASE! YOU ARE AMAZING!:):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)


-Kaleigh!