   Lady K2
2008-09-21 . chapter 1Wow. That was incredible. Your prose flowed like a poem, and you captured the characters so well I could hear their voices in their dialogue and thoughts. I loved your descriptions. Your choice of words was unique for painting a familiar picture, and they made it so much richer. For example, "something he said stumped me to take root on my spot, like weeds suddenly grew around my feet and halted me there." Beautiful, and awakens the imagination.
I found this part to be particularly hilarious. "I chuckled silently as Sokka did a side jump and punched one of his fists in the air for emphasis. Clearly, he was excited." I love the tone of the last sentence. Nice touch.
I also thought Katara's apology was right on. I could hear her tumbling that out clearly, and the very, very chaste kiss was the perfect touch.
It was soo good to finally see a story acknowledge Toph's accomplishment of real friends. She soo had that coming.
Lastly (well, I could go on but to save space), your descriptions of the colors were very beautiful, and spot on not only with the characters, but with the relation of colors to traits, and to their perspective elements. Very nice.
All in all, this was a spectacularly written fic. Very impressed. Thanks and Happy Writings! |
 imotel
2008-09-21 . chapter 1Firstly yeah it did seem a little off, but if that was how you saw it then who can complain...
it is definetly good, i really enjoyed reading it... i think it was like 2 months ago i first saw the awakening, not because it was delayed to Australia, just because i actually never thought that i would like it...
Keep up the writing, i look foward to your next story...
Tehe, 1st review |
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