While you may use italics too much, it's at least well-written. I'll add it.

It's my first H2O fanfic,and I must say it's verry wel written.I'm looking forward to the next chapter and coul you tell me in an author's note next time where I coul find more H2O fanfics?

Hey, I love you story! the styl your writing in is great and I can hardly wait for the next chapter, pls don't stop writing! :)

Wow :)
I just found this and it's extremely well-written.
Well done.

-Cetacean.

Please update sonn! I wanna read more!

woah...rlly descriptive..great chapter

More, More More! Update please!

How did you do it?... Six pages...
Anyway, fantastic job. I'll definitely keep on reading this story! One of the things I really like about it is that there is lots of description. I don't like reading stories with too much dialogue, as they can get really boring, but you've definitely made a good balance between dialogue and description. Love it! (And please, please, please do not keep me waiting too long for the next chapter! I NEED to find out the real reason why Zane broke up with Rikki!)
Oops, I need to remind myself this isn't the real show, let alone real life. Haha.
*Exploding BonBon*

Ok, these comments may seem like a giant ramble but I'm going to jot them down in the order they occured to me.

That little banter/exchange between Emma and Lewis felt a lot like flirting (though I'm not sure that was intentional). I loved it. But you know me and crazy couples. It's not that I necessarily picture them as a god match, but I liked the 'differnt/orignal' feel I got from the chemistry you created for them in their little scene. :)

Ash. I can't stand him. I get that you're writing him as a nice guy -- but since in my head he's annoying (which is totally unfair since I haven't even really scene a full episode with him yet) I'm really annoyed with the way he's pretty much pressuring Emma to advance their relationship in a way she doesn't seem ready for. On the other hand, I love her reistance to him.

And, I could be wrong, but the line: "you don't have to be scared, Em, because nothing's going to split us up. . . .” felt really prophetic -- as in a foreshadow that they actually will. I hope that's the case. I desperately hope that's the case. Tell mw if you think I'm being unfair.

I'm curious, in your fic, does Ash know that the girls are mermaids?

I love how long your author's notes are. It's cute. ^_^

And I can't wait until Zane actually makes an appearance. A big part of me is hoping that their breakup makes it possible for a little Emma/Zane. You're shocked, I know. ;) It's not that I don't like Rikki/Zane. I do like Rikki a lot. She's cute and spunky. But somehow her and Zane too similar; there's a lot of drama there, but it's not necessarily the kind I find interesting...

I'm hoping you'll pm me to discuss aspects of this where I'm totally wrong, and other where I might be right?

Ooh, conflict. I love it. :)

Lewis really is a sweet heart too. Not like most guys in the universe. But maybe I'm being unfair. I'm a cynic at heart and it tends to bias my judgement.

I haven't actually seen any of the Charlotte episodes (other than the first two or so) or Ash's either. Knowing me, I might actually like her. I tend to have a soft spot for female villains, don't ask me why... We'll see I guess. Ash, on the other hand, seems harder to like from what I've read. But I'll give him a chance.

As far as the lack of reviews goes -- it may have to do with the fact that Nickelodean has rerun the same 2 episodes for over a month now. They haven't even tried to mix it up. Some people's interest probably waned -- I know mine did. I was hoping to catch up with the show's beginning. Alas.

Plus, you faithfully review my little stories. How could I not read and review yours?

That said, I'll have to read the next xhapters tomorrow. It's super late here (1am on the dot) and I need to go to bed.

Great first chapter, Sokai. I enjoyed it. I remember you being open to unconventional pairings (like me). I'm wondering if you'll pursue that in your piece. :)

Either way, I'm sure it'll be fun to read.

Yow, heat's a powerful thing ^^; But there's gotta be more behind Zane dumping Rikki than just that. I mean, it's awfully peculiar and Ash seems really cute ^^ But I gotta wonder why Rikki's 'payback' is gonna hit Lewis and Ash if she wants Zane to pay... Hope to read more!

Hey Sokai!
I am really enjoying this story so far.
You use so much descriptive language, it's awesome!!
Normally I don't like fic's with no Rikki/Zane, but this one seems really good, and seems to have a plot from whats in the summary. When will you next be updating??

Spiff

This is great. I like your story so far. Just one thing that confuses me, and you aren't the only one who has done it. I don't know about you, but I was under the impression that Ash had already graduated High School.