Well it's not real. :P
Canon+consistency just doesn't match up.

Great story! It was very interesting.
The ending was the best part.

You have a random page break in there that doesn't really make sense. But other than that, awesome!

Actually that's really good! It's like you put MR in a nutshell. Althought I can't really imagine Max being a princess. The beginning of the story looks, good (it's in line with the first book) but it gets a little confusing after that. But, good work!

Better than canon! With fairy tales and stuff!

Yeah, I have nothing constructive to say, other than I liked it. Which doesn't help. At all.