This story basically sucked. it was rushed and horrible. it was cheesy, and really had no point. Let's hope all your stories aren't like that

I'm tempted to flame, but I won't.

That wasn't very good at all, but you could probably improve it and make it at least readable.

That was way too short and rushed. You could have taken a scene like that and made a lot more out of it.

First of all, you either need a beta to check your spelling and grammar, or to start checking over that yourself.

Next, there's no way that something like that would have happened so fast. You need to add more detail, like telling us what went on in Bella's head. Also, you probably could add a lot more description, like describing the school or the way other characters look.

The reader doesn't really get a chance to get to know the characters either. We don't know anything about Bella or how she views Peter and Alexa.

These are just a few suggestions, but hopefully they will be helpful.
Keep trying and good luck.

Oh my god... *dashes for the bathroom and empties stomach*

This is...this is...aauugh... *barfs again*

P-p-please...do the world a favor and keep this stuff in your diary, where it belonged in the FIRST PLACE. Your writing is an insult to all intelligent people out there, and it's quite obvious that you care more about William Moseley than Narnia itself (or the REAL Peter Pevensie, for that matter). Those two things combined are enough to make any decent Narnia fan sick to their stomach.

Please, just...ugh... *runs to the bathroom again*

ERR.
Nice Beginning.
But Bella And Peter Making Up In 5 Seconds? Not That Good. He Could've Tried To Call Her A Million Times But She Wasn't Answering, Buying Her Flowers And Placing Them At The Door Or Something.
It Felt Rushed, In Other words