very sad, but you are right in saying that stuff like this happened. Great writing, keep it up!

The way Grissom treated her sucked...

another great ff, I thought maybe a second chapter would be there to click onto lol


loved it

okay...that sound?...hearts breaking...wonderfully empathetic story...you captured both characters' essence, their loneliness and their inability to be at the same place at the same time...great work...too bad you wouldn't continue with additional encounters that ultimately lead to their coming together...nice job!

I like! And now I want scotch...

~Pandora

Sad face here! Lovely words as usual with you. I'm sure they had many a' f-ed up times just like this before they became intimate. I need more of your work soon! It's really the first name I look for in my inbox. I don't even wanna write anymore after reading it!

Perfect.. his resistance, her backing down... perfect.

Um...wow
That was one of the most amazing pieces of writing I've ever read. Your descriptions of the bar, and the characters actions etc were wonderful. In my quest as an aspiring writer - I've always been told "show not tell" and you certainly follow that method too. Please keep up the good work and i agree it is angsty. :-)

Poor Sara Se tried

SO GOOD! I always wonder about who she called. I could totally see this happening. They must have had moments and conversations like this. Maybe one of those things "that did or didn't happen between us" things Sara mentions in Invisible Evidence? hehehe. Keep on writing! I love your stories!

very good again
the end is sad but real and perfect !!
I'm waiting for others stories ! lol

i think the last section with the cab was so sad. you write them so well. i am looking forward to your "afterw(o)rds".