|Reviews for Innocence|
| l1s44p 6/9/13 . chapter 1
It is really such a shame that very little review to this story I think, I really like it :)
I would really love it if this story continue
| Sailor GaOn Donut 4/3/11 . chapter 1
| Mooniecat 8/3/10 . chapter 1
I have to say I agree with everyone else about adding Zafira and the wolkenritter to this. I really wish you could elaborate on how they ended up with Nanoha and how the dimensional disturbance happened. And good ending since you would add the "beginning". Yeah, I am asking for more. Please?
| Lance58 7/5/10 . chapter 1
nice story hope you continue to write
| ReviewerPlus 6/13/10 . chapter 1
THIS IS AWESOME, just pure awesomesauce.
| Knight of Dusk 3/4/10 . chapter 1
*Random generic complaint on the story*
But seriously, it's very good.
And I really hope you continue this, it has so much potential.
| Sociopathic-Antichrist 5/9/09 . chapter 1
That was awesome!
Zafira and Nanoha? Kick-ass, especially given their natures.
This really should be expanded on with a proper beginnging and an end. It really did rock :D
Sweet and tragic at moments. We demand moar!
| NeverEverFaceTheDark 3/1/09 . chapter 1
I think it's most definitely an interesting idea...yup, I'd certainly read it if you'd write more!
| DreamShadower 2/1/09 . chapter 1
A very interesting AU indeed. I like how you got Zafira down so well.
Also with giving Nanoha and Fate even more of a reason to Fight. Interesting to combine Nanoha ans the Wolkenitter.
If you ever decide to continue this it'd be an interesting plotline to follow.
| markesellus 10/12/08 . chapter 1
I like this one a lot because Zafira's in it. Also it was interesting to see an AU-ish thing with Nanoha and the Wolken Ritter. Again, I like your style of writing.
| xFireWorx 9/30/08 . chapter 1
Well first off this is a great piece of writing! You're definitely getting better with each piece you write! Yay!
I loved the AU aspects to it! I just wished there was a little more from Fate's POV of view (continuation please :D ...?)
I thought Zafira was well done. A hard feat to pull off because he generally doesn't appear in most NanoFate centric stories. I like how you had replaced him for Yuuno to parallel with Arf. People generally overuse Yuuno so it gets a little dry after a little while-good job on breaking 'story' archetypes!
The last part when Nanoha saved Fate was sad, but sweet in a way. I thought you were going to kill off Nanoha and I got really scared/upset! Then I was extremely relieved when she lived through it...
The only thing that bothered me was that you used 'x' instead of a line break. I'm really randomly OCD at times-so sorry!
Keep going at it!
| DezoPenguin 9/29/08 . chapter 1
A fairly conventional story, though not badly executed (especially from Fate's POV). What makes it stand out are the original elements, which in turn make it a good candidate for a continuation or expansion beyond a one-shot: the age-up effect opens the door for a more romantic or at least mature initial relationship between the heroines (and, because of that, more confusion along the way)-which can also be reflected in the more serious and personal concerns Nanoha has about her family (nothing like a little "Help Fate or save my family?" angst...), the question of why the Wolkenritter are serving/associated with Nanoha is intriguing...and hey, if you get around to Hayate, does this mean that the Book of Darkness has a Guardian Ferret Librarian? So...write more!
| Kazumi 9/29/08 . chapter 1
Here, the true Nanoha!
Not White Devil or else, just the real Nanoha :p it's really good I love your story
But it seems a little short for my appetite XD you don't planning to make an another part for this story? T.T
| Maxmilian 9/28/08 . chapter 1
I liked how u switched Zafira for Yuuno. I don't like Yuuno at all :P
He and Arf are wolf familliars so they are like counterparts as are Fate and Nanoha so they all fit together pretty nice
Won't u think about writing more to this?
If not then just good job.