very interesting and unusual! i am in a hurry right now so I can't say much, but I am looking forward to more.

Yes it does drag on slightly but worth reading because of its indepth look at the Skrit Na. I hope your narrator will eventually get a name.

What are they doing?
Where are they?
What is happening?

Oh, cool! I remember how I really liked this fanfic... ;-). It's been a while, but this is just as great as I remember. Keep it up!

Great story so far.Keep up the good work!

Well written and good grammer. But you should progress quicker and if your going to make him grow up to become a Skrit Na pirate, give ranks and try to involve other aliens like Andalites and Yeerks.

I don't like the word kid... it's out of place in this rather elegant story...
Still a good chapter, though I don't know where it's leading.

This is a really original take on something in canon that wasn't discussed at all, and I really like it. I like the vague sense that they are being tested or monitored for something, it's very Ender's Game.

One little problem I have is the structure. It's cool that you chose to tell this story in present tense, and without any dialog, but I feel like your main character isn't advancing quickly enough to stay engaged in the plot. He should be discovering concrete words and ideas for things he's facing. This also brings up the question of why he knows what a "ball" and "nurse maid" are when he doesn't know what to call other things, especially since no one is telling him. But this may be a personal gripe. I'm a very impatient reader and once a situation is established, I like to see progress.

I'm really looking forward to when he does start to develop a concrete grasp on his universe, and if my theories that he's being monitored for placement aboard a ship or training program are right. I'm very intrigued, and I like your writing style.

This is a very interesting idea. I like how you've incorporated the Skrit Na's idea of ownership into their most basic instincts; it goes a long way towards explaining why the species is what it is. Some passages are a bit confusing, but any story written from the point of view of a barely-sentient creature is going to be confusing if you're writing it accurately, so that's perfectly fine and maybe even a good thing.

Very interesting, very good grammar, very well-written. I'm hooked, this is a great elaboration on the Skrit Na. It seems a bit odd, though, that the Skrit are intelligent enough to have what appears to be a leader. I understand you had to make them more intelligent in order to write a story about them, but sometimes it gets a little too much.
Still, keep it up. I'm dying to know what's happening next.

How interesting. I wonder what is happening? I look forward to the next chapter.

Another excellent chapter.

Interesting story.

From my POV, the Skrit protagonist seems to have a complex - that of taking and owning things.

Continue please :)


MS

This is a great story! Very interesting insight into a race, and I love your style of writing! I hope you keep going with this!

Well chapter this chapter is just as interesting as the previous one. Though I don't know what keeps on happening to him, where he is being taken for example.