loving this story so much!
i don't find them 2 b OOC at all. they're both people who keep their emotions inside their heads and you capture their inner monologues brilliantly!
would definitely love some more!:D

Aww this is really sweet. I like it. Keep it up

nice story! really liked this last chapter you put up. update soon

Oh that was SO cute!! Poor Temari must want to kill him now!! I wish he would explain it to her why he picked Ino (but then again, its your story).. I thought they were really in character, not at all OOC!! You did a great job!! please update soon! i really want to know what happens next!

Well typed. The plot is interesting, but I'm curious as to why a sandstorm was wet. Or why it was wet in the dessert in the first place. The part where you were describing Temari just waking up is somewhat unclear. Other than that, this is one of the better fanfics I've read. I don't get the feel that a 5 year old is trying to attempt a story like I get with some other fics. In other words, the story is has it's own sophistication.

How cute! Loved the last line. "Just a bit. Maybe" Very cute.

Aw that was so cute! i'd really like to see what happens next!! (that was a hint to update) XD