Wow... your writing style is very interesting but very good and convincing. I'm not going to lie but holy moly this creeped me out big time. Seriously...what's wrong with those Cullens? Thank you for writing this.

Woah! It's really awesome... slightly disturbing, but really well written and convincing. The repeated insistance that she's only seven worked well. Good work.
P.S. I got lead here by tvtropes, which is something to be commended on. Congratulations.

It was creepy, and you got your point across, but you missed some major plot points established in the saga and that greatly took away from the piece.

The first factual error is that Renesmee ages mentally very rapidly. She would never look like an eighteen year old and be as mentally developed as a seven year old. Rather, it would only take her about seven years to age to eighteen or nineteen. That's a fact from the series.

Also, I was always under the impression that imprinting meant the imprinter could do *nothing* to harm the person they imprinted on. The idea that Jacob would ever rape Renesmee -- given the withstanding circumstances -- is rather absurd.

I was actually linked here by TV-Tropes, and I have to say that this is brilliant. The simple words and repetition of 'I'm Only Seven' did quite a lot to drive this home. Not only is Jacob+Nessie the sickest fucking thing in the world, but the way that the whole family is just sitting back and accepting that she isn't really 18 and only 7 is the creepiest part for me. BAD family! BAD!

That was well writing, interesting...and creepy!
I have goosebumps now.

Oh Lord this is creepy...so wonderfully creepy...

I'm glad someone FINALLY looked into this. I find that Twilight is much more enjoyable when you deconstruct it and play it totally straight. Meyer spends a lot of time on this whole child-grooming fantasy but I like how you take it to the logical extreme. I was disturbed by this fic because the idea of a seven year old being promised to an older is inherently disturbing. Yes I know that in the original books she would have aged mentally faster but it's still interesting to see where this whole imprinting nonsense can lead.

Outstanding Deconstruction. There needs to be more Twilight fics like this one.

This is a brilliant fic. I won't beat around the bush here; it truly brings out the flaws and general crepiness of Meyer's writing in Breaking Dawn. Reading this sent yet another chill down my spine. Ignore the haters, they really are stupid not to realise what you're trying to do here. You are a pearl amongst swine in the word of fanfic authors- and believe me, there are a lot of swine ;)

This is scary and really good. Not many people take a close look at hoe creepy Nessie and Jacob's relationship could be. I don't think that her family would have let this happen if she aged at this pace mentaly but you write it well enough to make me wonder.

Excellent - hits like the proverbial tonne of bricks. I think the exaggeration actually works for it, serving as a wake-up call to those defending the story, whilst its counterpart shows that you did do the research and were paying attention.

Good work, and I'd be happy to read your fics for any fandom you care to name.

I found this a lot more haunting than the alternate version you did...and it has given me another reason to stop reading breaking dawn after the first hundred or so pages.
This should be forwarded to SMeyer to show her how much she screwed up.
Ignore all the technicalities of 'her mental age blah blah'
however way you dress it up, it is wrong and you have perfectly, and simply shown that. bravo.

Ah, seems everyone else has already said their needed words. But I will say that the reviews from the people who didn't understand scare me even more than the story. With that said, Bravo.

O.M.G

its amazing how with such simple words you could create such a creepy (in a good way), scary feel.
i didnt exactly "like" it (i'm all about the fluff) but it was definitely interesting, original... really good. instant fave

Wow...Just...Wow

This is amazing! It's creepy and scared the shit out me, quite frankly because of how you wrote it. I was linked here by TvTropes and by God, your fic is definately in the 10% that isn't shit [sturgeon's law]. It dud an amazing job of showing how even though her body has matured she is still a child, mentally. So, in short, you and your story kick Twilight's sparkly arse.

Puts things into perspective, doesn't it? How's she gonna mature mentally that fast? She's a shild in an adult's body, for pete's sake!