you really know how to do a cliffhanger eh? lol.

Talk about your cliffhanger! Arg, I need to know what happens next! I thought Raina was dead, and so, it seems, did Michael. Interesting twist having Victor not be working for Carla. I am intrigued and sincerely hope you continue this story.

Well, I liked that it was all put up at once.

I liked it. Enough to review, which usually I don't do. Overall it's good, there are a few missing words in places, but not many.

I hope that you will continue. I liked the prequel as well.

I especially like the twist, and hope that you will continue, as I expect you could do a lot with it. :)

Hey, just a few tips:

You've double posted this story. You might want to take down one version, otherwise you can get in trouble on this site.

Secondly, there are very few people who will read a 10,0 word story when it's all been put up at once. Try chapter by chapter posting over a few days.

Your spelling and syntax looks good, which is a brilliant start, in fanfic. Michael's voice is also in character. Unfortunately, I fall prey to the same 'don't have time'-itis of most, and haven't read much of it.

Anyway, just thought I should let know. Please don't take it the wrong way.