Very nice shifting of angle here. I like the way that you switch characters and then bring the story back to Betts so fluidly.
Smooth dialogue as well :)

Man. That was kind of perverse, to see Betts going on the bottle, but it made sense. And the thing about Brian - less than rational, but I guess that makes sense too.
Very smooth writing here. You came up with some really nice descriptive elements and dialogue, especially on Logan's part. I especially liked the description of Logan as he came in. Very nice indeed.
One thing I find about your writing - you have a great sense of setting the scene. I can always see every setting as though I'm watching it with my own eyes. Well done on that count.
So now I'm wondering whether the 'drowning her sorrows' part was only a temporary thing or not...;)

Promising, so far.

I thought you dealt with Betsy's anger very well. It's absolutely sickening when people pity you and try to walk around you and not hurt you. The phrase I could never stand was 'I'm sorry', which always sounds so damned pathetic. I don't blame Betts at all for lashing out. I guess anyone would.

Definitely not fluff, my friend ;) There are some harsh realities in there and I liked how you handled them. For some reason the bit that sticks in my mind the most is the bit about lying...Very nice writing there. And it was satisfying to see Scott and Jean getting slated for being too perfect. Well, it had to be said sometime :)

So now I'm looking forward to seeing how Betts deals with Rebecca. Honestly the way things stand now, I admire her for even beginning to love the girl...

Aw, a sweet end to a rough story. My favorite type. _ I think you've definitely been improving.

Meanwhile, tell Betsy to get well soon. _

Well, to be honest, I thought you used a bit too many adverbs in this chapter, but other than that... GREAT JOB! I found this part very exciting. I loved the freaky look at Rebecca's mind. Can't wait to see what happens next. :-)

Man, you sure know drama. Ever think of writing a piece baed off of Exiles #10? I think you'd make that work on _So_ many levels. Well anyway, I'm really enjoying this current piece of work.

Heey, nice work. I liked how you did address the issue of Jean's feelings and I can't wait to see how all of these characters do resolve the problems they have. It's interesting this fic, yeah.

Sorry if I sound out of it. I spent like an hour hauling my cousins (who each weigh about 35-45 lbs) around the room and now I'm sleeepy... sleepy...

Great work on the fic!

That was a nicely written chapter. Good job!

Hey Phil! I really liked this one. Very powerful. I loved the tension in the first part, and you write Logan very well. I must see part 3. I muuuuuuuuuuuuust! [drools]

Hey.. this story is SO good, when is the next part available? good job, your narrative is excellent