You need to Finish this! This is not done! =) I've been coming back to this site for months... more?

I like this story a lot. I always thought needed a love interest. Please, give us a chapter. This is awesome. ;)_

i like! do continue, added you to favourites.

i think lizzy is great, not mary sue-ish, good job so far.

I agree with the person below me. Where's chapter 5?! Tear!

Where is chapter five? I love this fic and Max is so in-character and Lizzy is the best OC I've seen for him. Chapter five soon?

I don't think it was too focused at all. I thnk it was very sweet and romantic to hear her described and explained through his eyes. It actually lets you get into both their heads.

Lovely as always, darling. And I liked the comic relief. Otherwise, I might sit right down and cry. =D

First of all (I know I've said this before), but Lizzy is just a fabulous OC. Particularly for Max. Their personalities mesh so nicely and it never seems awkward or forced. It's easy to envision her with the rest of the group.

The fact you put that horrendous (...okay, I sing it at the top of my lungs while driving, but that's besides the point.) Katy Perry song in your fic made me giggle for a few minutes. It was perfectly placed.

So was the...mm, well it wasn't exactly a sex scene, was it. The "striptease" scene (xD) was great, too. The thought of Max moaning "Honey Pie"...*censored* xD

Anyway, great chapter and I'll be watching for an update.

Much love
~KT

This chappy was absolutely amazing. I love this story and Lizzy's family sounds awesome. Update soon please!

Oh, I saw a lot more references.
'I'd always been a dancer' from 'She came in through the bathroom window' and 'Day Tripper' from... Day Tripper...
THAT'S not too important, anyways. I'm here to REVIEW. :D
and Chuck and Dave. Sorry.

A bonding chapter was nice. The dialogue was well done, and Max is still in character, which is an AMAZING talent, by the way. This story deserves more reviews.
Thanks for this!

All the best to you.
Missy

I am a horrible, horrible person who should be severly punished.

I have no idea why I haven't reviewed this chapter. I'm thinking that I thought I reviewed it, but really didn't. No matter, I'm doing it now, damn it!

I don't care if this was a filler chapter. Saying it was heartbreaking isn't enough. This almost made me cry, dude. In all seriousness.

“But…” He looked at her, confused. “But it hurts.”

Right about there was when my vision started getting blurry. It just KILLED me.

In case I didn't want to in the first place, this chapter really made me want to hold Max until it all goes away. :(

Beautifully written and heartbreaking. I can't wait for more.

Sorry for taking so long to review!

Much love
~KT

Oh please keep it up, it's wonderfully lovely.
I mean, the whole subject idea, not particularly.
But the writing, the different idea... it is.

God.
I FREAKING love this fic.

It's absolutely Amazing and is my favorite here right now. I love Lizzy's character and Max is totally in character. The portrayal of him in the hospital is heartbreaking (it makes me want to crawl on the bed besides him and hold him until he gets better). So far, my favorite chapters are the first and third (this is not to say your second isn't good though...). Max seems truly ** up here and it is so sad. My favorite line in the third chapter is "“But…” He looked at her, confused. “But it hurts.”" He seems like a little, lost kid here who doesn't understand why he is so sick.

My only caveat is in chapter 1, Lizzie and Eleanor are cleaning up Max and the worst part of the wound is on his left side (Chapter 1 - But it didn’t take her long to see where the real damage was—his abdomen and nearly his entire LEFT side had been ripped to shreds by the blast that had taken out the entire unit.) Buy in subsequent chapters, the worst of it seem to have moved to the right side (Chapter 2: And out of nowhere he was met with the sight of his own mangled flesh—a frightening zigzag pattern of harsh, rust-colored stitches that crisscrossed over his bare, concave stomach, wrapping around his RIGHT side and up his back.). You don't need to go back to fix it, but it'd be a nice thing to clarify in chapter 4... it just bugs me. BUT I flipping love your bloody descriptions--the scenes involving the wounds are the best.

I love how you incorporate Beatles tunes in your story and how you make us hear the alternative tune almost exactly how you describe it in your notes.

Keep Writing and add more. I keep compulsively checking this site just for this story.

Kudos!
~Anon.

That was a beautiful end to the chapter. That part about wishing she could wear lipstick so he'd be left with a mark, perfect.

This is so much fun. It feels like you're right there singing along with them. Ilove her boyfriend too :)

Man, I feel like I've been away from this place forever. Nice to be back though. I do love the stories for this movie, especially like the lyrics being all throughout. Great beginning.