It's good. I like it. You should do some sort of spinnoff or crossover thing with the same idea. Sounds good.

beautiful... grammer can be used, but still beautiful.

Wow. Very beautiful. I like it very much.
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I Love this fic! It's very original and unlike the usual Kaiyako stuff. Please update soon.

"Farther from your light I wander

Your hope is fading from my sight

Our bond dissolves like salt in water

I can lean on you no more..." Beautiful.

Beautiful...that's all I can say...I mean, the words are so pretty, and wonderful...and the emotions are so amazing! You are an amazing writer!

Remember me? Probably not, but anyhoo...that was a really good poem, and you could definitly use it as a stand-alone if you wanted. And of course, it goes without saying that it'd make the best prologue for a story known to mankind. Ok. Maybe I'm exagerating just a *leetle*. But wow...I'm a true-blue fan of your writing now.

Nicely written. If you work a story off of this I'd be very interested in reading it. Anyways the poem is awesome you've got some real talent.

*Smiles!*

woah really good very poetic please continue!

Must...REad...THIs...STORY...NNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOWWWW!

Kewl poem!