it has been a while since i r&r'd. i had to reread the whole story to catch up to this point in the story. i realy enjoyed this and i like the cultural comparesons that you put in. i am hopeing that you arn't finished yet... i kind of would like to know what happend at the expo lol. any way keep up the good work, cheers.

It was a fun read all the way. Only the last chapters were a bit short. But it takes a lot of time to make a story so can't say I disagree.

P.S. Forgot about those drawings... :( but have been busy lately (send them a WHILE ago)school and all.

While I enjoyed the political machinations described in the chapter (and how it often bites people in the **).
There was one particular thing that stood out that was fairly bad.
My only complaint is how you squished the disparate scenes of the fanfics together. I mean,
one second we're talking about a bunch of guys throwing back some pints, eating pork scratching and discusing reassignment.
The next scene we have Sir Alfie and Sir Andrews proclaiming "it's five o-clock man! Break out the sherry." And other political things.
You might want to emphasize the scene change with something. Would be much clearer that the scene has changed and the situation is different.

nother good chapter i look forward to more in the future.

Excellent read. Just a slight nitpick - Kanuka's rank is Lieutenant, not Sergeant. Cheers :)

this was an interesting chapter and i exspecialy liked the chapter notes at the end. Ja-ne =(^_^)=

good to see another chapter out, i look forward to the next. Ja-ne =(^_^)=

I like this chapter quite a bit. The description of the engineers trying to rescue the engine container is good, and the dialogue between Goto and Gallagher is wonderful.

The only serious criticism I have is more like a question - why don't they use the Ingrams to get the container free? Or maybe that's still to come, considering it's still stuck. ^__^

Anyway, it's good to see that this fic's still ongoing... please keep up the great work!

Great story, hope many more chapters will follow. Keep up the good work. ^_^

a good chapter keep up the good work Ja-ne.

this is getting good, I wonder if Kanuka and Trenchard are going to "hook up". keep up the good work, ja-ne =(^_^)=

very interesting I can hardly wait for the next chapter. Ja-ne =(^_^)=

Wow o.o; Even Desaix has looked at it. I'm actually quite suprised at all the reviews this has had considering that to write this I have only read the first manga and have no experience of how Kanuka really is ^_^.

But feeble excuses aside, every one of the flaws that Desaix are perfectly well founded and well..bloody well true. This was afterall a practice fic ^_^

Anyway, this unnacceptable situation shall be recitified as I have ordered the first TV DVD and the first movie. Soooo When I get around to doing a sequel, everything should be a bit more accurate, etc. Also if I can I'll see the 3rd Patlabor movie when it comes out in Japan in the summer. Until then Mata ne!

Pudduh

Okay, first off I should say I love this story. A lot. Very good plot, and I'm anxious to see where it's going.

HOWEVER, I found a lot of problems- mostly in characterization. Some of them are a little nitpicky as well, but *shrug* I personally like it when I get nitpicked. I'll put the whole list here, although it does get rather long (it's for all five chapters, mind)

- Asuma is WAY too familiar with his father. They are very estranged, and rarely talk, and when they do talk they get into huge fights. Asuma's father keeps much of the business away from Asuma, and so it's unlikely he would know from his father that the company is going into export model production. He has other sources for that kind of information.

- It's somewhat unclear what his rank is, but Sakaki is by no means Shinobu's subordinate. If anyone is going to order anyone around, it'd be the other way. Likewise, he wouldn't avoid her to get out of work- he LIKES work.

- Kanuka isn't around all of the series... though this is a minor point. She was only around for 'six months' or roughly half the TV series.

- Goto's role assignments seem a bit off, and for odd reasons. Why is he seperating Noa and Asuma, anyway? Asuma was the one who polished Noa's rookiness off, NOT Kanuka- she was in charge of Ohta. (In fact, by the manga's standards, she wasn't even around for most of her early period). Kanuka would also be more likely to be assigned the independent role, as Noa and Asuma's teamwork is the best in the series. That, and Noa doesn't work well with Kanuka- evidence being the two times Kanuka took over for Asuma's injuries.

- SV2 is underfunded. They do NOT have a well-stocked spare parts supply- they often have to canabalize from the third labor to keep things running.

- SV2 has a rather poor reputation, not a good one.

- SV2 technically refers to BOTH Shinobu and Goto's units. Shinobu commands Special Vehicles, Second Section, unit 1. Gotoh commands Special Vehicles, Second Section, unit 2. And, technically, neither outranks the other- Shinobu doesn't order Gotoh around, nor can she.

- Noa is unlikely to be very interested in the new labor- she prefers Alphonse above all others, and usually is disinterested when a new labor arrives. Shige, from the mechanics squad, and Unit 1's team (if Kanuka's here, then Unit 1 doesn't have it's Zeros yet, so they'd be drooling over something that's the Ingram's equal), would be anxious to give it a whirl. Noa would try to find fault with it from it's external appearance.

I suppose that's all I found. Really, that's not bad, considering if I did a line by line (which is much more intensive and which I only do by e-mail) I wouldn't have many more comments than that, beyond a minor grammarspelling error or two. Again, enjoy the story, but there are these little things...

this is defanately getting interesting, keep up the good work. Ja-ne =(^_^)=