Loved the story very well written and creativeI couldn't stop reading it I stayed up till six am reading bravo bravo!

Awwwwwwwwwww!... I just finished reading it! I just wish there would be more... Would you by any chance write a sequel to the sequel any time soon?... I beg you to consider it, because I totally LOVED your Fanfic...
Now that I'm done reading your story, I honestly don't know what to do with my life anymore! Lol! Jk... But seriously keep writing :) :) :)

Yeah this chapter is much better. The detail and references to the book are great! I look forward to reading more :)

It was a good continuation of the book, but could you add more detail? Like describe the surroundings and add more visual appeals?

it was good i got the ending. hope you write more about these two.

IM IN LOVE WITH YOUR STORY!

PLEASE READ THIS REVIEW! rea all of it its things you need to hear as a writer. Read the whole ghing you might find it helpful.

Ok. Just finished reading all 24 chapters and you did a good job. But I wanna give some xonstructive criticism.. Please don't take it the wrong way cause you are extremely talented.. But ok here goes, my first impression when Vivian got pregnant I didn't like it. I warmed up to it but it seemed to happen a little fast. In fact, all the while when you wrote everything almost seemed rushed. Like you went from the first day if one mont to the last day of the next one in a matter of paragraphs. It was just over all so quickly. The reason I didn't like Vivien getting pregnant so soon is due to the fact that it felt like 2 or 3 days after the night they were mated. Like they were "married" one day ad pregnant the next. Ok another thing is that... I don't know how well you got Viviens character Annette Klause showed her as an extremely independent fiery young woman. And I was disappointed when she seemed a little weak and dependent on Gabriel like she was a classic maiden in distress which she is the complete opposite. She's lost some strength it seems. Also it's sweet how her and Gabriel say I love you all the time but I think you do it to much. The amount of times they say it makes me think of a puppy love (no pun intended) 13 year old who say I love you after a week and over use the term. Love can be expressed in more ways than words and I think you should think of ways to being that out instead of saying I love you every other paragraph. Sorry if that sounded harsh but writers would never publish without the views of others and you kept askin for a review. On another note, I did love the scene where she saw Aiden at the inn. And I would encourage for a bother run in between the two of them. That in itself is another exciting little side story. Of course I like her with Gabe more than aiden but still. Oh should do a chapter from Aidens view point when he's thinking about their run in. And there needs to be a big climax or conflicting event in te story. Cause you're writing is good but it's almost like the everyday life of Vivien. The kidnapping was good but we need something like when Vivien was "promised" so to speak to Gabe in blood and chocolate. Another tip... Please please please don't make her pregnant again! It just seems all so fast. Let them enjoy their marriage life. They already had one kid before thy could happen. None the less. Nice job. I enjoyed it :) I hope you take what I said as coming from a friend. Sincerely - C

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very good lol i loved it please write more! im curiious what did you think of the movie?

Not bad at all. A little rushed in some points but still good. One thing though is Vivien doesn't hate the 5 like you suggest in ch. 5 and 6. At the end of blood and chocolate they were the ones who would sit outside her window and keep her company. They're her friends. She still loves them. And Willem is always nice to her no matter what.

Is Vivian going to have another pup? If so it should be a girl called Melody. Will and that one girl should have triplets called jonhathen,Elizabeth and kristi

I love it when I finished blood and chocolate. i was upset because I didn't know what happened next! You should write a third I want to know if Alex becomes a big brother. ( if he is then make it a girl named Melody I love that name!)

I thought your 1st chapter was great. I love how you describe why she let Gabriel catch her and how he understood her for who she was. I can't wait to read more.

You know Vivian . . . I completely agree with you.

I love this story and I hope you write more.

still want more