Keep going-I'm curious as to what happens!

Yes, I really seem to be enjoying reading about the details of Henry and Eileen's new life that you've created. I could read a whole novel's worth!

What I think in regards to the basic quality of the writing, though, is that perhaps you should take care to check over and correct the small spelling mistakes that occasionally appear just a little more scrupulously. Although I don't easily let them distract me, they fundamentally do distract.

If you try to read from a first-time reader's frame of mind, maybe you can also pick up certain sentence patterns that may have required a second glance over because it happened to be marginally unclear. Such things may be fixed as easily as by changing a single word. I think you may find this especially in the third chapter.

I don't know if I am, but I've written the above to help you publish chapters that at least I could enjoy even more. :)

This is actually not so uninteresting; I would enjoy it if there is more. Keep writing and improving!

I don't have anything specific more to say except that "Eilene" is spelt "Eileen". .

This is interesting :) would love to read more, update when you can!