Good writing, I look forward to the next chapter!

*raises hand meekly* I no car freak, but it's actually an Aston Martin Vanquish... Not like it matters, I'm just a detail freak!
Anyway, I hope you had a good break!
Good chapter... Oh... Charlie! Wonder what comes next. No draining him dry please!

Your story is very interesting! I am looking forward to reading chapter six. I have to say though, there isn't a lot of suspense in it and that kinda leaves the readers not caring about reading the next chapter sometimes. I think its a good thing that Jacob imprinted also. Now Bella won't get annoyed with him as much :P Although you made it seem like he wasn't really affected by his imprinting... All in all, I think it's a good story but it could use work. Good luck ^.^

Thanks for answering my last review, though most of us know when all of the Cullens were changed so it doesn't really matter, to me at least, that you got the dates wrong.
I did notice a little mistake that you made in there though. Lol, you made Mandy blush when she was having her mental conversation with Edward, which I thought was hilarious. xD
About not being able to have a Renesmee. It is possible. I actually have a story where James changed Bella at the end of Twilight. The Renesmee in my story isn't exactly blood related to Bella but I just couldn't picture vampire Bella without Renesmee. If you want to check out my story, feel free. In fact, I'd love it if you would. =D

JoAnne

Lol... Yeah, I liked Jake okay before he went all werewolf, and over-bearing... Like how he was at the VERY beginning of New Moon... And his teensy bits in Twilight.
Also, I would like to add that most of the years you've got are wrong... Jasper changed sometime around the 1850's, since it was the Civil War (how does one have a CIVIL war?) and Carlisle, well he's in the books... I think that it's the 1600's... Alice, no one really knows, but you're probably close since she has a living great-nephew or niece... Rose was 1933, and Emmett in 1935. Then, there's Edward. He was BORN in 1901, and CHANGED in 1918... Esme was changed in the 20's.
Please don't take offense. It was bothering me...

lovelovelove

Hm... Interesting twist...
But you know, you still kinda have to deal with Jake... Sorry for being such a spoilsport, but Sarah is still in school there, and she probably has parents and all...

Nice, I've been waiting for someone to have Jacob imprint. I mean, the poor man is deprived. :D
Does Bella have Renesmee in this story? Just wondering...
I like it though, it's got a nice touch to it.

JoAnne

Great chapter, i can't wait for the next one. Just one thing above you said that Phil was a football player, he plays Minor Leage Baseball.

YEAH!! SOme justice aginst Jacob.. I personally would have tortured him and then made him die a slow cruel death... yeah i hate him but i love this story

Ooh I like it! Can't wait for the next chapter!
I'd like to hear some stories about Chelle and Mandy's past. How old are they?
I think it would also be interesting if you did some of it in the Cullens POVs.
Anyway, can't wait to read more,

JoAnne

Yay! More Mandy and Chelle!
I miss Hurricane!
Ha, I really liked getting Sarah in on the secret! It's funny!

Eh... Not so different... Bella's still totally in control, and still blood-thirsty. (Not literally... just, wanting to hurt people.) It's actually pretty funny though... I'm guessing you liked Bella's reaction to Jacob imprinting on Renesmee?
I would just like to day, the way you are marking their speech is confusing me... I'm just so used to quotation marks...

i lov eyour fanfic i can't wait for the next chapter R&R Later, Wishaway2014

Hahaha this was pretty good! I hope you update soon!

Interesting... I'd like to see how it developes!
if you ever want me to read something just ask, and I'll get to it eventually...