glad that it ended in a good way and all were ok well done to April thinking the way she did getting the younger ones out.

as for this story said to see it end perhaps a sequal in the future?

actually i think having nicole do the shooting was powerful and this team nothing ever stops that is for sure let's just hope the team can get there in time before shit hits the fan again.

and from pollock i would so take that as a compliment

awww come on they have to find Jess and the kids are so good and moms to the rescue looking after kids is defintly a great distraction

just found this story and I can't wait to read more you know the cahracters so well and your OFC is amazing and relateable

can't wait for more

pretty good

Good stuff.

It is getting better and I commend you for that but I did find it confusing. A bit of detail could help that.

Good effort - post some more soon.

A lot happened which is good but I feel you need to be more of a storyteller. If it's based more on the plot that the characters then make the plot compelling. Suspense/depth compliments action. As a reader I like to unwrap the event rather than just having it handed to me. Keep on with it though, it has improved and you have promise and a good imagination.

Very well done.

Sorry. I just realized I never reviewed this chapter. Better late than never I figure, so nice job.

-Abagail

It's getting better, again very linear and literal, but better.

Much better. No typos that I could find. Great work.

-Abagail

Now we're getting somewhere. Keep writing.