Ohh boy. Its one thing after the other in this place.
I'm always sitting at the edge of my seat reading this story, please update soon!

GOD I WISH THEY WOULD HAVE LET RAY KILL TALA! HE IS SUCH AND ASS!
AND IF KAI STAYS WITH TALA, THEN HE IS AN EVEN BIGGER ASS! I don't know how many times I cried for Ray, I have no idea what to expect! Please, oh please let Kai and Ray be together! And Please Update! :D

RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI!
I don't think I can stretch out how much it has to be RAY/KAI! RAY/KAI! 3 3 3 3

SO! I've read this entire thing in about two days. And let me tell you! your writing has gotten so much better! I almost didn't want to read this because of the earlier chapters but I have read a lot of your stories in the past (which were all good I might add) so I decided to stick with this one. I'm glad I did too :)

Honestly I haven't read or written a fanfiction in about a year and a half maybe, and all that time I have you as a author alert on my e-mail so i kept getting e-mails every time you updated this story and I was like ALRIGHT! I'll read the damn thing! And me just getting my wisdom teeth removed, I have a lot of time on my hands, if i wasn't sleeping away the pain I was reading. :) However the funny parts hurt so much to laugh to! but it was worth it.

Sorry this is so long! But I really feel like I needed to review this story, even though it's changed so much over the years and you will have to rewrite some of it because your ideas for it have changed, i really like how the story has ended up so far! It makes me sad that Tala is a traitor! and that sweet Brooklyn might have a part to play too! AHH SO INTENSE! I do wounder though if Tyson and Hilary will get together eventually? if she even survives for that matter!

Anyways... I hope you finish this story soon! i really want to know what happens!

Still love all your stories Kiki!
-Alice's-Love

I love this story and I'm glad you updated. I really can't say much just yet, but I honestly can't wait to see who lives and who dies or at least gets critically injured. Update soon and I hope KaiRay get a semi-happy ending.

Please tell me you're still working on this!

Also please avoid killing Maxie, he's too adora-cute

i guest wait see what going happen next that i didn't see that coming. wonder is brooklyn work for boris also, this story is get intersting by minute and i can't wait for the next chapter to see what going happen next will they got out, thank for the great story which i enjoy read them i guess wait see what going happen next, so keep great work, cya until next time :)

Wow... Brooklyn is the real deal! I imagined myself as Tala when he figured he was the decoy and then LMFAO at the rest, even Kai... For falling at the confession and forgetting the other Boris' pawn

Ok, so I've had a huge amount of time to read through all these 20 chapters in 3 days (oh, so much reading .), and so I thought I should give you my oppinion now .
1. Yes, as I see you wrote in authors note, you have indeed written them OOC quite often. I felt a bit awkward reading Tala as a fan girl in the first chapters, seing as he is a guy who keeps his cool and is rather uptight. Though this IS a fanfic, meaning you're to write your characters as you wish. Now he's better, I think you write him better as the traitor because you stay more true to his character, which is something I like. As to why he revealed himself, I guess I'll know by next chapter. I also miss the good guy Tyson who's always for the better of the team, who forgives and "forgets". But, he's not the main character, so I guess that's not important. I also just wanna point out that to Kai; silence speak louder than words. And I think he says too much xD I'll put the OOC to side now, you already know that.
2. I was really excited about the first chapters I read. Why? Because kidnapping, possibly torture and the feeling it was somewhat like "Hunger Games". I loved they were being released into the woods, dogs and men chasing them. It started very nice I thought, they were running and hiding, needed to search for food etc. I kinda feel that's a bit gone now. Though you always point out that they don't want to go alone because they might be attacked, it feels as thoguh they're not being hunted anymore. But, saying that, I know some of them have already died. I think it's a bit sad that you kind of leave them out, meaning we don't know anything about their death. We wern't there to see them get killed, we don't know how they were killed and we dont know how they look after they're killed. You only describe it as bloody. I realise this is hard to keep up with, and that's because you have a really huge amount of characters to take into consideration. Plus ususally when reading a story we have one point of view, and now we see the story from Boris', Tala's, Kai's AND Ray's point of view. You're also making drama between Boris and Tala, Kai and Tala, Ray and Tala, Kai and Ray. There's a lot of stories in here being told from different view, and it's quite alot, giving less space to the MAIN story, the hunt. that's a lot of work, and I am amazed you manage to keep it up and continue the story. Very understandable that you left Voltaire out.

But I do enjoy the story. I laugh, smile and want to know how things develop. I see you have many ideas, twists and turns to make the story more interesting. My advise is, however, next time write a story with less to take into consideration, less characters to have fockus on, less dramatric things happening between so many different characters. And great job, keep at it! Many people enjoy and read your stories!

I have to be completely honest, the first part of this chapter made me cry. I don't think I've ever felt so much empathy towards a character before, but while I was reading, it really felt like -I- was Ray kneeling in the dirt. It was so well written, you should be proud of this chapter!

In response to chapter 20:
And then we should Ray beat the living shot out of Tala. Everyone is probably dead thanks to that douche. I hate Tala with a passion now.

You know what? I hate Kai and Tala now. They just lose me off. One minute Tala is telling Kai that he is going to leave him. The next he is all over him. Then Kai is getting mad at just about everyone because of things out of their control. It is jot Ray who hurt Tala. It is that dead guy, Tala himself, and (for all intense purposes) Kai who hurt Tala. So everyone who think that Ray did this or that can go screw themselves. It pisses me right the fuck off.
And another thing, if Kai really doesn't like Ray like that, then go tell the handsome boy. Stop killing him. Damn.
Love your story. And Ray is my favorite character from the Beyblade series and I think he should go out with Mariah since everyone are being assholes.

I started this story at 3:49 in the morning and ended at 8:18 am. and I gotta say I love this story. It's suspenseful, tragic, comforting and funny all in one. Now I have a few things to say...
ONE: I truly hope Kai and Ray be together, just for the fact that Ray IS what Kai needs and cuz I am a major KaiRay fan.
TWO: Tala and Brooklyn NEED to be together...pure perfection perfect, enough said.
THREE: You said you were gonna change Tala's previous 'yay-for-KaixRay-attitude' I don't know why, but I think you should keep it. To me it's like he was okay with it just because he never realized how much he truly wanted or rather needed Kai seeing as it was all sexual thrill for him or (something along those lines)
FOUR: To this point, I just want oen part of Boris' plan to be fucked up and this is the part that should be it. I really hope (sorry Tala for what I'm gonna say) Kai doesn't side with Tala, only because I feel that at this point Lee's death was the breaking point for Ray and if he does then all hope (my hope rather) of KaiRay will be shattered. I still feel as though Kai and Tala should remain friends albeit slightly strained, but it is your story so it's whatevers. Just update soon...seriously, update!

woah didn't see that twist in the story and i can't wait for the next chapter to see ray attack tala for that hurt his friend. it was get intersting by minute, thank for other chapter can't wait for the next chapter to see what going happen now, keep up the great work. cya until next time :)

WOOOW this chapter was so great! I love Tala more, and I think that Kai should be with him XD