Short chapter? Maybe so, yet you did capture Rav trying to read the mind and intentions of another -- such a difficult thing to do correctly, and even then there's more luck than science with it, especially when the detective work is performed by an amateur. I'd like to say that Aly and you have something else in mind, it being Connecticut and all, and not Japan.

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Oh. I like it so far. :)

wow, you updated! awesome chap.. i hope to read more.. update soon.:)

Aw!
This is like so sad!
How dare that person leave w/ out Ravivs stuff! How cruel!
I always have my iPod on me in case that happens.

And thanx for the shoutout! So sweet!
I still need reveiws tho! I'm almost done writing chap 3 of Senior Class of 2009 and now the story is beginning to turn good! Read it! And reveiw!

wow.. loved it! please update.. it's been a while since i read some good potf/raly fanfics..

"All I could do was not in a range of movement. I just stood up in my seat, watching her walk away." -- Good imagery, and I can see what you are cleverly relaying here. Could you polish it up just a bit to be smoother?

Just some spelling and punctuation to clear up that a spell checker misses:
ware off -- wear
were together. -- we're
your not the only one -- you're
its harder than we both thought -- it's
its easier to fall apart -- it's
I here her say over the sound of tinkling. -- hear
Now I'm just glad I'm faced away from her, she can't see me at my worst. -- ;
its once again silent. Now its like an -- it's, it's
leaning in to her roughly, -- into
lots of periods to replace with commas and capitals to return to lower-case when dialogue ends, such as: "... passengers to there seats." The attendant said. -- their seats," the attendant said.

We're kept in the moment through both chapters, by changing scenes, internal and external dialogue, and wonderful conflict -- you've done an amazing job here! I'm a bit concerned that your desire to get these two love birds together is being resolved by chapter two and will be curious to see what happens next! Maybe the title says it all!

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Aw!
That was so cute! I liked that story!
Keep on updating!
I think i will get chapter 5 of "The good part of meddling" sometime next week.
I also wrote another story, "Senior Class of 2009" and chapter 2 should come out this weekend.

This is simply amazing.

AW!
So adorable!
Plz update soon!

Great start! what a reunion huh? on an airplane. I loved it!