I have read all of the stories up to this point and I have to say i am looking forward to learning how this series of stories ends.

One tiny consistency nitpick:

In "Stumbling into the Light" (Ch. 14) Glitch's eyes are described as "black pupiless". In "Interludes" (Ch. 12) they are described as "brilliant blue". In "Stumbling into the Light", we're introduced to her as she'd hooked up to a massive computer. In "Interludes" she's walking down the hall. So I put the "black-eyed" look down as something that happens when she is doing her computer schtick. And I'm not quibbling about her hair described as "inky black" vs. "deep chocolate brown, almost black" because hair shade can seriously fluctuate under different types of light. And I really feel sorry for Glitch, being as she's basically a cybernetic slave who's never been allowed to choose something different. Oddly enough, I think Adora would understand her.

Candi

WOW!

Well done - oh how I would have loved that spell Keldor used bduring labour (but then my longest labour was only 4 hours).

Why do I have a feeling of being hit over the head with a plot point here? (Keldor remembering taking Adora, Lana looking forward to having a grandchild no-one will take from her, Adam's over protecting Teela and the final scene). I guess time will tell if this is just me picking up on things that aren't there or not.

Aside from the above heavy forshadowing well done. Only one more chapter to go and then we have to wait for the next part...

Keldor formerly Skeletor is more than a warrior mage is now a battle cleric really nice because of who he is now. I just had my fourth little one so I know the mood swings and the joy. I hope Adam & Teela has twins, I like how the way you give the good and the bad and ugly characters their due in this story. Very nice.

lovely,lovely,lovely:):)-me,i'll settle for twin sons for adam and teela-for starters ,that is(LOL)

Aw :).

"because i'm pregnant ,you idiot"(laughing)-that's typical teela,raging hormones due to a little bundle of joy and dear old evelyn cmb!!gosh-but that was great!

Awesome! I wonder what kind of father Adam will be.

Excellent chapter, ladies. I think it will be interesting to see how you bring Christianty into this further if you choose to do so.

"Teela" and "pregnant" - wow. I blurted this fact out when I read it, in excitment. (Insert comical image of me here, cupping my mouth because my parents were right next door, and those are two words they do not want to hear in the same sentence anytime soon. LOL) I am happy that Teela is pregnant. It explains the mood-swings. Can't wait to she and Adam tell the family.

And Cringer got a girlfriend...er girlcat? Callie - I'll just consider her his mate-to-be.

Nitpicks first: I thought I had pointed it out before but looking back I see I forgot to so let me do it now: Horde Prime's son is named Prince Zed not Jed.

Also in this chapter you said it was the first time Adam transformed since Orko's wedding but there was a whole plot point where he was He-Man in chapter 10. Ram Man even points out He-Man didn't come to the wedding!

Finally, I'm not sure how to say this lightly but I must get it off my chest: I really DON'T like the Bible aspect you're working in here. I preferred it when it was simply Good vs. Evil and not focusing on a specific religion. I don't want to start a religious debate, but let's just say that basically in trying to appease that one person's beliefs you went against mine. It probably would have been better to leave such things up to the individual reader's interpretation. That way no one gets offended.

Okay that's said and done now as for the actual story and main plot that I'm enjoying.

Of course Teela's pregnant we were told that would happen in the introduction! It'll be interesting to see how long it takes Adam to figure it out though.

Keldor's backstory is very well written.

The villains on both planets are keeping me hooked to see what they're going to do to make our heroes miserable. That's tough to do: eliminate established villains and make original ones that keep the reader's interest, but you've pulled it off well. On that note though are you ever going to use characters from the toy line that didn't appear on the show?

Teela's pregnant isn't she? I recognize mood swings anywhere.

OMG. Teela is having mood swings and I think I know why! ^.^

Wonderful story thus far. I love the way you add another intrigue each chapter, drop it for a couple chapters then take them up again just to make us tense up and wonder in the interim.

Thanks for the short interim in chapters! I look forward to the finale of this story and the beginning of Reunions!

Lovely as always. Nice to see the other masters and get some questions answered. Also nice to see Teela again - she seemed to slip into the background for a while there :).

Thank you both for the lovely Christmas present! You both continue to build the tension as we wait for Keldor and co's inevitable travels to Eternia! ^_^ ~Kevona