That's cute.

Ive always loved senaxriku, the underdog of eyeshield21 couples.

Review game:

I must confess, I have barely any knowlege of this fandom other than this fan fic in front of me. Forgive me for any gender mix ups.

So reading on, the first paragraph gave me a feeling that Sena is much loved by her parents and despised by others and she has no idea why. So that is a good start and that really gets me thinking. So looking from this she seems like a tomboy and she felt upset for being the left one out, but also wanted to herself.

My impression here with Hiruma is that he's helped and supported Sena and it contrasts to the first half of the fic where she feels isolated, alone and unable to be herself. So the second half gives her more of a happy ending.

The setting made me feel that Sena was grateful for her friends and support. The determination in her character dosen't make her appear whiney but mature and it really shows how much of a fighter she is.

I liked reading this, if I ever get the time, I'll take a look at this fandom.

i was going to review this for the reviewing game, but I don't think I can make a very well thought out review for this. It's not my style of books. I can't tell you what was supposed to be entertaining or interesting about this story. It seemed more like a non-fiction first-person retelling of someones life, that was uninvolving and unimportant. Like I said, this story isn't neccessarily bad, it's just not the sort of thing I'm interested in. No matter how good the spelling or grammar is, it's the context of the story that really counts. Which by the way I did notice a grammar mistake or two, not that important though.

It isn't written poorly, and it seems to continue you on from sentence to sentence, but the subject and idea of the story isn't very well chosen. Maybe for someone else.

As such I couldn't really post this up as a 'constructive well thought out' review for the review game, since i would likely be counter-flamed for it. Although I assure you none of this is meant as flames.

This is really great :D
i like female Sena fics
some of the ones i've read av made Sena into a girl and have changed the personality a little
but i like how u've brought through Sena's determination from how Sena really is :D
i think this works very well!!
great job :D